Looks like Santa has some special gifts this year. Love to see the package unwrapped. If you decide to take this further, I will look forward to it, but as it stands now its great. Keep writing even if it's something else, you have a good erotic concept and write well.
Like a sudden erection. I was surprised that the daughter just got in bed naked with her dad -- it all just seemed a little too quick. Still, I love it when a daughter sucks her daddy's cock. Hope they fuck soon and he then shove his stiff pole up her ass :)
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Anonymous05/30/14
Exceptional
Wonderful pacing. The POV shifts seem abrupt. It is the daughter's story, it isn't necessary to know what the father is thinking. Still, I give it 5 stars. A truly exceptional story. Very much like the Bolero in words, including the messy uncertain ending.
Love this story. Not one bad thing to say about it. Please hurry with part two of it. I'm anxious to know what happens next. :)
Don't let anyone's bad words stop you.
Definitely a five star story!!
Dear Lovelitererotica enjoy this story very much if anything might be just a little too short but still was great. Maybe you can continue this series and capture some more time between Father and Daughter and also maybe get something going between Daughter and Mother lover and the Father. Anyway keep it up was pretty good.
Miner
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Anonymous07/07/14
Very Good
Very good story. Believable, more frequently occurring than is usually imagined. Right length and just enough detail. Thanks and I'm looking forward to the sequel.
English
good start
I normally don't like virgin authors here on LIT but I like this one please keep it up
Nice Start
Looks like Santa has some special gifts this year. Love to see the package unwrapped. If you decide to take this further, I will look forward to it, but as it stands now its great. Keep writing even if it's something else, you have a good erotic concept and write well.
More!
Great beginnings for a virgin writer. Maybe you aren't a virgin, however. A little more biography info would be great.
Kinda rose up
Like a sudden erection. I was surprised that the daughter just got in bed naked with her dad -- it all just seemed a little too quick. Still, I love it when a daughter sucks her daddy's cock. Hope they fuck soon and he then shove his stiff pole up her ass :)
Exceptional
Wonderful pacing. The POV shifts seem abrupt. It is the daughter's story, it isn't necessary to know what the father is thinking. Still, I give it 5 stars. A truly exceptional story. Very much like the Bolero in words, including the messy uncertain ending.
great and well written!!
Love this story. Not one bad thing to say about it. Please hurry with part two of it. I'm anxious to know what happens next. :)
Don't let anyone's bad words stop you.
Definitely a five star story!!
Great Story !
Dear Lovelitererotica enjoy this story very much if anything might be just a little too short but still was great. Maybe you can continue this series and capture some more time between Father and Daughter and also maybe get something going between Daughter and Mother lover and the Father. Anyway keep it up was pretty good.
Miner
Very Good
Very good story. Believable, more frequently occurring than is usually imagined. Right length and just enough detail. Thanks and I'm looking forward to the sequel.
Right
Right story, right time! Amazing...
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