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by Anonymous05/29/14

Yuck

Where is the comedy or satire? This is just pure 8th grade fantasy not worthy of being on this site. She puts on a bra but then doesn't have it on later? Same for the panties. Why would someone open the door when only a mouth is seen through the peephole? Totally trash, not satire. Suggest you go back to your day job and leave the creative writing to others mature enough to do it.

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by Anonymous05/30/14

Fair

She was going to pick out undergarments when the doorbell rang. I coul have a used a lil more tension and description of their assets.

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