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Subway Girl Ch. 01

byDonnaBeck©
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by Anonymous

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by Sid060405/31/14

Thank you...

A great start and I'm looking forward to reading more. Thank you for sharing.

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by Keoni179105/31/14

Original

I'm really enjoying this. It's quite an original storyline.

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by Scurvydog4403505/31/14

Nice Story

HUGS

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by Anonymous05/31/14

Nice read

I quite enjoy the beggining of this story. I hope there will be more !

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by Anonymous05/31/14

Hello Donna,

Its a wonderful story.Its innocent,simple and crisp.It has no artificial embellishments but rather very honest and from the heart.
Thank you for writing it.
Jiya C.

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by Scotsman6905/31/14

A great start

decent writing, and a real story.

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by Anonymous05/31/14

Huggers Unite!

this story really struck a sensitive never for me.. I know how important hugs are for people. It seems like such a small thing that can make such a big difference in a person's life. And so I appreciate you writing the story and I hope you continue it.

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by MoonflowerWright06/01/14

Beautiful story!

Absolutely loved reading this! Cannot wait for more!

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by Anonymous06/02/14

YAWN! Gave up half way down the fist page.

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by CallMeABrit06/02/14

Loved it

What a gorgeous story. Simply told, no artifice, building the characters. More, please.

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by Yet_Another_User06/04/14

A Great Start!

I like the way that you showed us who the main character currently is and teased us with the impact that the hugs were having. I'm looking forward to seeing what develops going forward and the impact that it has on both of them.

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by arrowglass06/09/14

Really liked this story!

Enjoyed the difference...enjoyed the build up...just plain enjoyed it!

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by ambush18406/29/14

Really good

Now to read on

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by GaiusPetronius07/01/14

What a brilliant start!

I'm new to this series. Favorably impressed is putting it mildly. How you managed to get inside the head of somebody just one tiny step up from homeless and destitute is unfathomable. The taglines all say that this is "a story about love and redemption." I am delighted to be along for the ride.

In addition, I give you high marks for technical correctness and accuracy. Good grammar, spelling, punctuation, and syntax -- the combination is sadly rare among Literotica authors.

Finally, ignore the naysayers!

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by Anonymous07/14/14

so real yet like a fantasy

Its so brilliant that i feel like i am the main character... Keep it up you have the credentials of a great writer

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by Anonymous08/11/14

Enchanting.

Thank you for writing. I am looking forward to this work.
5*
Best regards,
Pultoy

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by bonnietaylor201/14/15

very sexual and romantic!!

gave it a 5

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by cherryontop197301/23/15

Beautifully written!

I needed an escape today and your story is just that. Your writing is masterful and I can feel the sweet pull of expectation you created for your central character. Very well done.

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by Anonymous02/18/15

Thanks

Curious and captivating first chapter. I believe I will like this.

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by Anonymous05/01/15

Amazing truly amazing

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by Harleyusaone05/23/15

Yes

I have patience
Good start 5

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by Kookaburra806/06/15

Not bad, not bad at all

Your on 5 stars so far. After reading Flower Girl I hope this story as a better ending...

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by bruce2207/21/15

Captivating it is.

As smooth an opening as I have seen, The central character is layered already.

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by Anonymous12/25/15

Fabulous

I'm reading for the second time and it still feels amazing.

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by rightbank06/05/16

getting to know him

want to know more
while asking who in the heck she is

wow, what a start!

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