Wild Ride

Rushed, clinical, unbelievable

Fantasy has to have some sort of basis in reality, otherwise people can't connect with it. Here, everything happened at breakneck speed; one minute he's being nerdish in his tent, a couple of paragraphs later he's ass-fucking his sister on a motorbike at a stop-light; not exactly a believable chain of events. There's no build-up to the moment, no real background,just "I saw my sister's thong, then I fucked her ass, the end."
And what's with the mother and her 'knowing' smile? Where did that come from, and what was it supposed to signify, and where did it go? If you're going to introduce story elements, such as the mother possibly suspecting they were up to something, or were going to do something, what was her basis for suspecting that, and why did it go nowhere? Not good, too rushed, 1 star.

If they were up at their parents cabin then why is Zeke in a tent. I agree this is rushed like the author was writing it quickly before mommy tucked him in at night. Nightie night pumpkin

Utter Pish.

That is NOT a compliment.

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What's a Jezirah?

:-))

And in keeping with the sophomoric writing of the story, did an asteroid fall on them when the story concluded?

Garbage. Pure garbage. (And not the Shirley Manson "Garbage". That would be a compliment, and this ain't a compliment.) This story was garbage, refuse, trash. It was a waste of time for anyone who bothered to read it.

Figure out how sex works

Pretty bad. Fantasy with no relation to reality.

Yuup crap

I agree with the others. What a waste of digital ink. I get that its fiction but dude you need to lay off the mind aultering stuff.

no, this is a fine story of hot sister-fucking

18 year old Zeke has a birthday party--up his own sister's cunt. He blows his brotherly balls up Jez's sweet little slit and floods it with his warm creamy sperm, just where Jez loves her brother's sperm to be. I just don't understand the bitter negative comments by some readers. Mr. S is a prolific author, with some really good stories to his credit, and he's a generous guy, just check out his Favorites. What has "Epiphany Jones" ever contributed, for instance? And what a name. Is his cousin Revelation Smith? Non-contributing readers should have a little more consideration for people like Mr. S, who actually write.

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for those of us that have actually rode a motorcycle fucking the driver while the bike is moving would be the most idiotic thing to ever dream of doing.next time start at the beginning of the tale not the middle where the mom knows the are fucking since they were 12 and leave out the daredevil crap.

Where to begin?

Let's start with chasing your sister who's wearing a sundress and eight inch heels while sucking on a lolipop and hoping to keep up with her. On second thought, forget it. The story started well enough but quickly turned into disjointed, impractical and unbelievable hogwash. Ever ridden a bike? Ever seen a woman try to just walk in eight inch heels? Your story had possibilities but you let it get away from you. Better luck next time.

Loved it! Would be great if you made more, she's so fucking bad!

Damn, makes me want a scoot again!

Fucking awesome! I think Ive read all of Sanzamour's incest stories now. They are definately well written, and with something of a unique writing style! I like it!! This one definately begs for more chapters, she absolutely has more adventures to share with him!! ;)