Epiphany

uh ok too short to really be interesting

Pls finish

Too Short?

No way. Everything that happened was enough. While waiting for the pearly gates our spirit came home to visit one last time. Could have been an episode of "Twilight Zone," X-rated, of course. Very powerful short story.

Five Big Stars

Sad

Sad

A sad little tale

Perfect length. Just enough to get the idea across, and a reminder to readers to take care of what's important in life, before it's too late.

the fact that she stopped at last second is MEANINGLESS

this marriage is over. The husband working too hard to support the wife is a manner and style she wants or demands is not reason to cheat

@patillie

Huh?

He's dead. It IS finished!

Impressive

The story SEEMED like another variation on the "he came home and ..." when you dropped this "ending" on us.
Nicely done. 5*!

Judging by the comments I read, some either misread or didn't finish the tale.

He's dead!!!

Some of these comments are laughable... How can you not get it?

Good story....good ending.

That was surprising, to say the least.

Interestingly different, but

Once again, our friend Harry sure does need to actually READ, now doesn't he?

That comment by him is hilarious.

I personally like different, this little short sure is.
Thanks,
MGM

Harryva comments are a joke

Does he know how to read, the man was dead his ghost was present. Killed in a car crash a while back , she loved him and had difficulty moving on. So I do not know what these other jokers were reading with there comments being so far off.

This story answers the question I've always wondered about.

It seems a number of commentators write their comments without really READING the story. Something I've suspected for awhile now. At least do the authors the courtesy of actually reading their stories before you comment rather than just throwing out inane or just plain stupid comments. This story is finished. He's dead.

Good short read

A widow always has to move on at sometime but that does not mean she forgets her first husband.

No wonder!

No wonder that darned 3rd stair didn't creak!
A good story, one I enjoyed.

Harry is a badly programmed bot

Not a real person.

This is somone elses work.

Unless the author is rewriting his/her own work. This is a story by someone else. IF so, plagiarism.

BOTS OF THE HEART

re-unite in all your electronic glory. TK U MLJ LV NV

Re: Plagiarism

Normally, I don't respond to anonymous comments. However, if you're going to make an accusation such as plagiarism... you better cite the author and/or the work that I allegedly copied. I can assure you that this is my own original work and I will not have you sully my name with a baseless accusation.

Different

It sure ended different than I figured but that's what's interesting about this group. Once in a while we get stories that have a different twist. Good 'un 5*

re: plagerism CLARIFICATION

There is a SIMILIAR story twist used in the story "I give my wife away" by curious2c. However, there are SIMILAR stories EVERYWHERE on this site! Using recurring themes is the bread and butter of the LW genre. There is only so many ways one can tell the tale of one or both spouses cheating on the other. I'm sure each author does their level-headed best to put their own spin on and unique flavor to a story that often times, is as old and well worn as the institution of marriage itself. There may be other stories out there that I am unaware of using a deceased spouse surprise twist, but the one I mentioned seems the closest. Because curious2c really tried to trick the reader up until the very end before the ultimate reveal, like Azpiri did here. With all of that said, anyone who would compare the stories side by side (or word by word), would find that they really are completely different stories, and offer NO instance of plagerism. I agree with the author's comment/response that "Epiphany" truly IS an original (and pretty well written) piece of work by Azpiri, and it represents HIS own work and his alone. I only voted 4 stars, but it was easily far superior to anything else posted today, and the clear highlight to my LW reading of the morning. Thanks author!

Not plagium

There are similar music themas and music performers can permorm with other method. Alison Krauss and the Union Station performed a lot of music in Bluegrass style, which were composed by other musicians and the AKUS performances were the better than the original. There are motivs, which are common and the Authors combine these motives with new directions, characters etc.. The plagium is the total copy only, but THIS IS NOT PLAGIUM AT ALL! Cervantes used the motives of the obsolate knight novells and his novell became a Worldliterature peak..............

weird but continue this to where he is sent back to her

Excellent story, HILARIOUS comment

This was a well-written and creative story, with a nice twist at the end. Short and sweet, and an important message about letting work dominate one's life and marriage. Nicely done.

The comment by Harry from VA is an instant classic! I literally laughed out loud. As someone else pointed out, it's almost as if he isn't a real person, but some sort of app that someone created to leave nasty comments on all Loving Wives stories that don't involve divorce, revenge or double homicide.

CAUGHT ME OFF GUARD...

AS I APPROACHED THE ENDING, I FELT SURE HE WOULD FIND HIS WIFE WITH A GUN IN HER LAP...ABOUT TO END IT ALL. BUT THEN....BOOM!!! WAS I EVER WRONG. THANKS FOR THE SURPRISE.

4*s

I was going along enjoying the story when BAMMO !!
It was over . Reminds me of 19 year old sex, lol.

AMerryMan

Didn't see it coming

although a bit short, i enjoyed it , loved the ending, didn't see it coming

Gave it a 4

When is the hard working wife gonna get killed. It a good story but 99 out 100 the writers kill off the husband.

to each their own

Didn't care for it at all to be honest.

Fun Story

The lightness leads to a lulling of our senses until we suddenly find ourselves on the other side of the pale.

Great flash tale.

Wow! Just wow! The ending snuck up on me. Good stuff, man.

5 Stars.

Nice read

Did not see the end coming.

Ummm..... Howdy Bruce

Do you see dead people? I did see the end coming, from about 1/2 way.

Thanks***

For the read .

Have I got a lot to say...

First a five, a glorious five!
Second, ignore H.I.V.; he's almost always wrong.
Third, this was not plagiarized.
Fourth, it was a truly touching story.

Keep writing!

I am sure you understood how we got to the point of the twist

I am just not sure I do.
Yes, it was a flash story. yes, it was written concisely. yes, you kept us wondering all the way to the end.
but
I don't know what happened? or if I was supposed to get something from the story that I am apparently missing.
it just leaves me a bit perplexed and with a bit of a
meh.

Really?!

Buy a dictionary and look up the word - original.

Odd

Not the ending, I get what you were trying to do. This was just filled with several odd phrases that made it seem like you were trying too hard to make something unique. For example . . .
"Not wanting to surprise her, I crept up the stairs mindful of not placing too much weight upon the third step in the stairwell."
Not wanting to surprise her? I think that is why he crept and skipped the creeky step.

WOW a good wife -

With horribly bad taste -

Too bad for him -

Let's hope they both find peace -

Nice story - great perspective -

Fun twist at the end

I got sucked into this short story, and it seemed like a lot of others. Then the twist at the end. Well done.

Also, congratulations on snaring a record number of anonymice and commentbots like Harry in VA. Reminded me of that movie with Bruce Willis:

"I see dumb people...they're everywhere.They walk around like everyone else. They don't even know that they're dumb."

rj

LIMBO IS THE WAITING PORT

for those departed and waiting for the call, TK U MLJ LV NV

Unexpected twist at the end

And well written -- again.

Shades of "Wonderful Life" ? Well, almost!

Unexpected twist? Not hardly!

This was as surprising as an Iran nuclear inspection. Can you say "Sixth Sense"?

for me

one paragraph to long
apart from that i totaly loved it
quality wiritng
intense , interesting , engaging & well crafted
.
xxxhugsxxx

Well done!

Love complex endings. Thanks

Take Cuckold tag off.

As evidenced at the end, there was no cheating or cuckolding. Husband was hanging around for unfinished business. That accomplished, he had an epiphany that he had passed on and true to their vows he made it to "til death do us part". The story illustrated how he had been neglectful to his wife and how stressful and demanding his job had been. Logic suggests he died on the job succumbing to the high stress then repeating that last day over and over until something changed that altered his perception of real life. That something was finding his wife's first attempt to move on after him, even though she wasn't quite ready. This shithead Damon, attempted to put hubby down and her reaction to it was as expected. Never, ever speak ill of the dead, especially if that person is a beloved spouse. She obviously felt her husband's presence and threw the dipshit moron "friend" out. Hubby being there to "watch" over her saved her a lot of pain and hurt by almost hooking up with the wrong guy. Once that happened, hubby was free to let go as was she once he finally departed from her. All vows were kept, honored and completed; no cheating or cuckolding here.

Negative Tiiger119 - this is the usual cuckold garbage. This author doesn't prescribe any else than that bullshit.

Don't believe it - read the other fucked up submissions. Besides, Tigger119 - why are your panties so bunched up & twisted? Take a chill pill.

Not All Surprise Endings Are Favorable

You had a very good story going but absolutely ruined it with the surprise ending.

NOT LW - Fantasy!

Wrong category. A widow fucking a living guy is NOT being adventurous! Fantasy or Erotic Coupling!

Not really sure the White Light would be beaming for Late (clueless) Hubby!
Smell some brimstone in there?

Take the cuckold tag off! He was dead, she was not cheating on him because he's a ghost.

lol the cuckold tag might be bait

Pretty sad story, but much too fleeting.
Anyhow, thanks for the read. Appreciate it.