by FOUNTAINPEN67
Quite a few guys have been influenced by hippy moms. The braless mom with hairy pussy made a lasting impression.
Love the story line, it makes sense and gives you a good foundation for future chapters. However, you need to get an editor; trust me it will help.
As previous comments stated: You'd benefit from better editing. Also, considering your audience here, and what we're probably doing while reading erotica, your story was awfully short. I'd suggest something at least twice as long as this one. And finally, please don't follow in the footsteps of so many other authors who submit a "Chapter One" story, and never get around to subsequent chapters.
At least end it with the incest happening at least once instead u end at him jerking off. Big deal!
You managed to talk me into eating a few pieces of cold pizza, so things ended well. So far the story is a BOLO, but I believe there is more to it somewhere.
RS
Some are saying that it didn't include any sexual interaction with the mom and was too short. But, I don't think they realized that this has more than one chapter! It's not over yet! The story will go on! READ THE NEXT ONES!
Other than that, keep up the good work, good story so far!
he was 23 inches long and lasted 10 seconds. I gave this a 5!!
Sorry but if you need to put drugs in your store ten please don't post it.
comments below - at least the first 4-5. the 2nd paragraph mentions their all stoners!!! and there are multiple chapters !!! i like the story at this point. i gave it 5 stars. its a good short set-up and tease, nothing more. but its a good, funny tease and it certainly seems like its going to get sexier! On to chapter 2!
And the anon who said no drugs - i don't know where you live and in what century - but no marijuana in a story? i almost think you must be on drugs!!!!
As an avid reader of mother/son incest stories, I like indepth character development. I like logical plot development. This chapter is starting to meet those requirements. Mother self-assured, self-aware and mentally mature. Son typical insecure 18 year old kid. Son is slowly learning his mother is a woman. It would go easier without the pot. Resolving reasonable doubt in favor of the author, I rated this chapter 4 stars.