We're like the flip side of the same coin! Awesome story!
Nice first effort, good use of descriptive language. Scenario though is not very realistic
I really don't think the scene is realistic.. im not saying its bad, it just kind of made it a tad harder to believe...Nice colourful language though.
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We're like the flip side of the same coin! Awesome story!
Nice
Nice first effort, good use of descriptive language. Scenario though is not very realistic
ummm..
I really don't think the scene is realistic.. im not saying its bad, it just kind of made it a tad harder to believe...Nice colourful language though.
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