Losing It to Coach Brian

great start. please continue

Good start. A few forgotten words, but the brain read over the missteps. Over all very good. Please continue...

Fine start!

Great first effort - don't stop!

Nice beginning. Felt a little rushed toward the end ( the oral sex, of course lol) but waiting for next part.

You're off to a good start. I like the story. Lot's of typo's though, more careful editing would make for an even better read. Keep at it! :-)

Love the story!

I love the story so far -- and eagerly await the next chapter detailing their sexual adventures. If Brian is such a muscular guy (college owing experience) and older, can he have a nice growth of chest hair for Eliza to run her fingers through? That's what helps to make a man sooooo sexy! I love to see that detail included in the description of these guys -- a nicely haired chest, treasure trail, and pubic bush!

This made my butthole itch

That's all I wanted to share.

Well

After a hard workout and getting all sweaty, I don't want anyone's tongue near my vajayjay until I can wash it off! Guess that's just me.

Also, the pond is a mile around...she ran four laps in half an hour...that's some fast running, yes?

WHEN IS THE NEXT CHAPTER??

dear anon

Anon, I run a 5.20 mile. So yes it is accurate that she ran a 30min 4 mile run.

Part 2 ???

Part 2!!! Part 2!!! Part 2!!! , lol...If you can't tell, I can't wait to read Part 2...

Can't wait for part 2!!!!

PLEASE!!!!! Get part 2 on the net!!!!! My cock is so hard from reading part 1 I will just have to stroke it until cum squirts all over my computer screen! FUCK!!!!!!! You write very convincingly and make me want to look you up!!!!