... go to "Literotica Index"; "Volunteer Editors" and see if you can get someone to coach you in writing, spelling, grammar, punctuation and PROOF READING.
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Anonymous06/18/14
I did you a favor
I didn't vote on this sory
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Anonymous06/19/14
You've never actually...
...been with a woman, have you?
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Anonymous12/29/15
You use the term fanny flaps to describe her pussy lips? Really?! First off, you need a bit of editing as you have a great number of grammatical errors and your story goes off one way and then another, which is distracting. You have a good start to the story, but it just is to much of the with the "filthy" theme line.
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Before you write any more ....
... go to "Literotica Index"; "Volunteer Editors" and see if you can get someone to coach you in writing, spelling, grammar, punctuation and PROOF READING.
I did you a favor
I didn't vote on this sory
You've never actually...
...been with a woman, have you?
You use the term fanny flaps to describe her pussy lips? Really?! First off, you need a bit of editing as you have a great number of grammatical errors and your story goes off one way and then another, which is distracting. You have a good start to the story, but it just is to much of the with the "filthy" theme line.
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