American Girl

Well done!

VERY well written, both characterization and plot. Not over-written, but with complexity woven into the story in ways that did not weigh it down. Excellent. No more needed for this story, but more stories please. Thank you.

Amazing. Great job on the story, my favorite part was Rafia and Mr. Smith :3

epic

This story was so good it had me turned on the whole time. Mr Smith is the shit keep writing more pls and maybe spend more time describing the sex and the physical feels too thanks

thank you so much! That's some serious high praise and I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.

If you didn't know, this story is part of my Wicked Summer for Carnal Girls series and I'm just getting ready to post the next part where Veronica gets what's coming to her for disrespecting Rafia and acting so horribly.

Extremely well done. My only surprise is that none of the boys finished in her mouth.

Boys, boys, boys...

Cowbulls, that's a good point, one I hadn't even considered.

I appreciate the kind words for the work. If you like this story, you might like my series, "A Wicked Summer for Carnal Girls." This is actually part 03 of that series, but I didn't realize Lit discourages us from posting duplicates. So far, this is the only story in the series with Rafia, but Veronica shows up in part 04.