Not terribly sexy, which is why, I guess, they didn't fuck. Just makes cuming hardly more than like peeing. OK for those who like rape, I guess. And did he ever go down on his sister? Who knows? Who cares?
A Blowjob is a blowjob, too bad she didn't enjoy him going down on her and getting her off as well, she would have looked at things differently.
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Anonymous06/17/14
started good end in shit
you started good but the force ruined it, yes she wanted it but it still ruined it and proved he doesn't love her. if he really loved her he would never have done it and told her why. as is it was a waste of time, hope you are smart enough to delete this and forget you ever wanted to write.
this was a horrible description of a female and it is painfully obvious that the author has no idea about women. He's probably a virgin and if not, he's never gotten a woman off. Let me point out the line that was a dead ringer that, "he dont know about women! he dont have that kind of knowledge!" (I didn't cum, but oddly I didn't want to either. I was willing to wait until later when we were laying in bed so I could sleep after, but now I wanted my energy for my next bout with my face in his crotch.) Women dont get tired after they cum and they sure as hell won't fall asleep. Women are full of energy after they cum and my girl stays wide awake for a few hours if we have night time sex. the only way a woman falls asleep after sex is by cuddling and feeling safe or she's tired from all the work and didn't get off but faked it. I didn't enjoy this story at all. I just kept thinking this guy has no idea about women and he even portrayed her to act like a man.
To the person who says women don't fall asleep after they cum, your not doing it well enough. After 3 strong orgasms my wife is out, unless we start fucking. She isn't wide awake. Your woman must not get what she needs or she is faking it.
Anyway, great story. I hope there is more to come.
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Anonymous06/18/14
Good
Above average, but I've had better.
And by the way, as a woman, I can confirm that orgasms tire me out. If I can't sleep, I masturbate to get tired. Your woman might be faking it, or she's not the norm.
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Anonymous06/19/14
Interesting concept. But not very believable.
The story idea is interesting but the characters weren't believable at all. In the end the main character was so poorly written that the story ended up not being all that erotic.
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Anonymous08/31/14
Cold, clinical, and curiously un-erotic
It reads almost like the transcript of a sexual-response experiment in a psychology course; I found it to be clinical and unrealistic, and obviously written by a man who has no real understanding of female psychology. I gave it no stars, as IO don't believe it belongs on this site, it has no real redeeming values as a story; as I said, it reads like the transcript of a clinical trial of some sort.
English
everyone needs a sister like that
great story. let me know when he works up the courage to piss on her!
Not Very Sexy
Not terribly sexy, which is why, I guess, they didn't fuck. Just makes cuming hardly more than like peeing. OK for those who like rape, I guess. And did he ever go down on his sister? Who knows? Who cares?
very good
nicely done a 5 star story
thank you
Just Ok
The way you lead into the story, you hinted at there being a reciprocal type thing yet you never mentioned him eating her.
Didn't really care for it
A Blowjob is a blowjob, too bad she didn't enjoy him going down on her and getting her off as well, she would have looked at things differently.
started good end in shit
you started good but the force ruined it, yes she wanted it but it still ruined it and proved he doesn't love her. if he really loved her he would never have done it and told her why. as is it was a waste of time, hope you are smart enough to delete this and forget you ever wanted to write.
meh
she said she would, why didn't he?
try harder
this was a horrible description of a female and it is painfully obvious that the author has no idea about women. He's probably a virgin and if not, he's never gotten a woman off. Let me point out the line that was a dead ringer that, "he dont know about women! he dont have that kind of knowledge!" (I didn't cum, but oddly I didn't want to either. I was willing to wait until later when we were laying in bed so I could sleep after, but now I wanted my energy for my next bout with my face in his crotch.) Women dont get tired after they cum and they sure as hell won't fall asleep. Women are full of energy after they cum and my girl stays wide awake for a few hours if we have night time sex. the only way a woman falls asleep after sex is by cuddling and feeling safe or she's tired from all the work and didn't get off but faked it. I didn't enjoy this story at all. I just kept thinking this guy has no idea about women and he even portrayed her to act like a man.
Great one
I wish she'd let him piss in her mouth.
great story
I thought it was a great story.
To the person who says women don't fall asleep after they cum, your not doing it well enough. After 3 strong orgasms my wife is out, unless we start fucking. She isn't wide awake. Your woman must not get what she needs or she is faking it.
Anyway, great story. I hope there is more to come.
Good
Above average, but I've had better.
And by the way, as a woman, I can confirm that orgasms tire me out. If I can't sleep, I masturbate to get tired. Your woman might be faking it, or she's not the norm.
Interesting concept. But not very believable.
The story idea is interesting but the characters weren't believable at all. In the end the main character was so poorly written that the story ended up not being all that erotic.
Cold, clinical, and curiously un-erotic
It reads almost like the transcript of a sexual-response experiment in a psychology course; I found it to be clinical and unrealistic, and obviously written by a man who has no real understanding of female psychology. I gave it no stars, as IO don't believe it belongs on this site, it has no real redeeming values as a story; as I said, it reads like the transcript of a clinical trial of some sort.
Great
I really enjoyed it. For me it would have been even better if she had drunk his piss. Thanks.
Still wish she had let him take her cherry
Excellent story.
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