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by TLMorgan06/18/14

Interesting concept!

I'm rather intrigued as to where your story heads from here. Good stuff!

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by dpone07/11/14

proofreading

You should run any future stories by an experienced proofreader before publishing them. There are quite a few basic errors in this piece. Things like then/than, were/was, missing commas, things like that. Keep trying, but make sure to improve your craft while you do it.

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