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by twelveoone06/17/14

very well

well done
good phrasing, word choice
Unseen, unnamed, atomic--
Your future lover, nemesis, anonymous
ending is a little too (anti?)climatic?
5ed

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by todski2806/18/14

interesting

I had to reference back to the title

delicious snowball of doom, definitely caught my attention,
didn't like the ending, but it does tie in with snowball, solid write,

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by butters06/18/14

oh i really llike this

a delicious pulse of sibilance throughout, like the swish of nanoseconds being brushed aside till the inevitable impact

so much going on with the phrasing it was a delight for me to read. thankyou.

in inimitable ovals, glitter-sprung

very nice

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