Most enjoyable, and quite a plausible story. Your grammar is very good making your story easy to read and thus avoiding the annoying need to re-read sentences - however there are a few typos, but are few and far between. It was a sexy, saucy, 15-minute read; I'm looking forward to reading chapter 2. (4 stars)
I really like your writing style and thoroughly enjoyed this tale (or should I say tail?) I know good story telling takes time, so relax and work on Chapter 2 to make it something you like first. We can all wait.
Maybe I'm the only one but I felt like not letting them have sex in this chapter worked against you. And ussually I like stories that dont but I dont see a point to this subtle of a story with the mood so hightend
hmmm musically you would call this a variation on a theme
I just read chapter one of your story about Janet and her son.
a death in the family. too much alcohol. crying bringing them together for comforting and cuddling. followed by one of them having an orgasm.
do I see a pattern forming? If I were to read Ch. 02 of this series would I find out what happens next with Janet and her son? or Kimberly? or Elizabeth? or ?
English
A good start in a time worn subject. Here's hoping chapter 2 is quickly forthcoming.
good beginning
Its a very good beginning of an interesting story. waiting for second chapter.
A good first chapter....
Most enjoyable, and quite a plausible story. Your grammar is very good making your story easy to read and thus avoiding the annoying need to re-read sentences - however there are a few typos, but are few and far between. It was a sexy, saucy, 15-minute read; I'm looking forward to reading chapter 2. (4 stars)
I loved it mommy
Mommy I need release now due to the tale you so kindly shared with us.
continued excellence
I really like your writing style and thoroughly enjoyed this tale (or should I say tail?) I know good story telling takes time, so relax and work on Chapter 2 to make it something you like first. We can all wait.
Maybe I'm the only one but I felt like not letting them have sex in this chapter worked against you. And ussually I like stories that dont but I dont see a point to this subtle of a story with the mood so hightend
Sexy Start
I like the way you started the story out Very believable I look forward to reading chapter two Cindy
Exciting
We loved reading this story and looking forward to more chapters
Melissa xx
Wonderful
Thanks for the reading. Loved the way you worded the story. So excited to say the least.
bm
Only An "R" Away!
Enjoyed it, and look forward to Chapter 2! The "R" reference, is because I'm a Garry, too, with 2 "r"s, instead of 1! Oh, how I wish that it was me!
Loved it!
I really enjoyed your story Cindy. I'm really looking forward to reading the rest of your work!
hmmm musically you would call this a variation on a theme
I just read chapter one of your story about Janet and her son.
a death in the family. too much alcohol. crying bringing them together for comforting and cuddling. followed by one of them having an orgasm.
do I see a pattern forming? If I were to read Ch. 02 of this series would I find out what happens next with Janet and her son? or Kimberly? or Elizabeth? or ?
As always
Love your writing. Found myself cuming with him! Bring on the next chapter.
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