All Comments on 'House Guest'

I enjoyed reading your story. Thank you for sharing.

A wonderful story! And not improbable! Very thoughtful, articulate dialogue.

Truly enjoyed the story! I suspect that there could be a second chapter, but at the same time I don't know if one is required. The selfish part of me is hoping for the second chapter though. Again, a wonderful story. Thank you!

Title says it.

Simply superb - "H" worthy again!

what a wonderful story, sweet,romantic and believeable

Really enjoyed this. Please continue this on to a truly happy ending.

Definitely feels like more!

ram

Very sweet.

Several to many chapters could come from your writing with these characters.

BRAVO!! Please continue, superb depth with erotic, sexy fun included.

Thanks a lot.

I very much appreciated the fact that your characters didn't try to accommodate very fetish or sexual act, they seemed more like real people. I would like to see further adventures with these characters

Very enjoyable story.

Great dialog!

Conclusion leaves an opening for more chapters.

That I didn't even notice one of my favorite symphonies finished. Thanks.

more please, i think that says enough.

A good tale, well-timed and a good read.

Thank you.

HP

great tale but needs a sequel to end it.

Was a great build up to a romance, but then stops.

What happens to them?

I really enjoyed this. As others have said, I could see another chapter with a long term happy ending but this is good if you do not wish to.

More please! I just love your work.

The title says it all !!

Fun, sexy, sweet. Definitely left me wanting more. Um, that's a hint.

No idea how the hell I'm going to get the smile off my face.

i was feeling a little low and saw u had posted a story, your stories make me smile so i thought this one may do the same and it did, made me laugh and smile ...thanks!

i hope there is going to be more of this and the quiet one story too.

Hands down this has got to be one of the best stories I've read. I didn't want it to end.

This story is not only really good...erotic...sensual...a love story...extremely well written...and makes me just want more more more more!!!! Please give us that!!!

Very few writers can mix heart warming romance and steamy erotica with the deft touch you display in this lovely story. I agree with those comments begging for a sequel. There is so much more about Pete and Jess' relationship to be explored.

This love story was recommended to me. I am surely happy it was. Good writing as well as reading. Thank you very much. If more was written it would not have the effect it has as is. Warmth and happiness. Cheers!

One of the best romance / erotic stories I' ve read anywhere, not just here.

needs a good finish!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Absolutely great story.... you MUST write a sequel!!!

As much as I'd like to read more of these two, I'm not sure a sequel is necessary.

She's helping him rejoin the living. He's helping her get over her hurt. If it ends, they will move on with happy memories. If not, all the better.

M389, congratulations, you have accomplished a well-crafted erotic modern romance.

With well-developed characters. The dialogue and action and sex are believably adult.

A rarity on this site.

This is the first story I have ever read on literotica. I am enthralled. So thrilled I signed up. Beautiful.

Debbie

This was a great story and hopefully there will be more installments.

I gave you a "5" and that's something I never do.

Look forward to more installments.

jd

Well crafted story, great details, nice sex scenes. On to my favorite authors list you go.

I thought it was just an excellent tale! Five Stars.

Well developed characters, really nice build-up to the tasteful sex.

One of the best we've read.

I really enjoyed this story. Poor slob had to live with a mostly naked model for days and then gets to keep her for longer. I feel so sorry for the old sod.

A nice enjoyable story. It definitely needs a sequel as the reader is left hanging at the end wondering what ultimately happened in their relationship.

GeorgeInOmaha

What a perfect middle-aged (or better) fantasy! Sigh. I'm done, now reality returns...

Wonderfully done - thank you. A sequel would be appreciated, especially if it includes a baby bump.

I have read in a very long time.

A prologue at least, would be helpful.

When his buddy called to ask if Jess could stay with Pete, it was mentioned that she had two jobs lined up in the area. We only hear about one of them. ????

She is a struggling student. The bulletin board on which the glowing revue and sample pictures Steve posted, is part of a small, well respected art school. Does Jess transfer there and stay with Pete?

Either way, it is a brilliant story, well written and cleverly crafted.

thank you

Very well written story. You did very well turning a lust fest into a romance, so the over the top lust didn't ruin it in the end. Only complete turn off for me is twice her age crap!

Loved how you went about writing this, so many would have butchered it on here, but, I think you did a very nice job on it. Congrats on a job very well done...

So do even older guys. :D

I liked the diamond analogy and I hadn't heard it before.

I am glad you didn't go straight to HEA, given the time frame involved, but it did leave things hanging. If you weren't intending a sequel, perhaps a one year later epilogue would have been appropriate.

Thanks for you effort. It is very much appreciated. I very much liked that the story was done with class, realism, and that it was no a crass sexual fest. I loved that the story develop at a pace which lets the characters to grow as individuals, and to finally come together. My only gripe with the story is the ending. We are left without a resolution if there was to be more or not. It would be awesome if at some point, sooner rather than later. You could pick on this story again. Thanks.

the parts are there, the chemistry is there and so Hap-Ever-Aft as two that deserve so much are sharing one another... NOW just complicate it with a kidnapping or something from past rears it's head and you have a R-rated thriller if you follow... good job

You make characters that are real people dealing with real relationships and issues, not just idealized sex machines. I do think you tend to connect too many unrelated thoughts into one sentence using commas, which is distracting. Excellent work, though.

Really well paced and well written. I could see the end coming, but the build up to it was beautiful!!

A delight to read... A brief vacation into heaven.

Fun story, well-written. Thanks for the excellent editing, which makes the story so easy to follow.

I am a semi-pro editor. This story, the characters, and the dialogue were just plain wonderful. But, I was so terribly disappointed that this writer simply does not know even the basics of certain punctuation conventions. He really must learn about where to place commas, periods, and quotation marks. His distracting failures take away from such a strong and beautiful story, and brand him as an aspiring amateur.

Its a shame that anons when critizing don't actually put their name to their comments.

This was a good story that could perhaps make another chapter or two.

A sensual and sexy love story that has just begun...needs follow up...please!!!!

And what the heck is Lit but a place for amateurs to start, see how they are received and if they would like to write more?

I'd rather read something from some one who shows heart than someone obsessed with perfection.

Nice read.

just keep on writing - this is good stuff

I guess I've read too many LW stories. I kept waiting for something bad to happen.

On one hand, guy falls for 20 year old gold digging model is bad. On the other, who would not to wake up to 20 year old models.

re:

guy falls for 20 year old gold digging model

Where?

Not this story.

Sure he does provide for her, men have been doing that for women for a very long time.

She offers to pay several times, though as a typical broke college student it would stretch her resources quite thin.

Doubtful his friend would have sent a user to him, and going by the description of him he would spot those.

Sweet story between a man 44 years old and a younger model 20 years old. I think she never found a real man in her short life, and when she found him, she was in love and lust.

Exist an second chapter of this story?

5* for you.

Good job!

Great read. More? Soon? A perfect 5 and thank you for the read. jntiques

I absolutely loved this story and would love to see a continuation!!!

On the one hand, as it is, you can end the story however you like in your imagination. The romantics can have them together happily ever after, the realists can have it be a happy fling they both remember for the rest of their lives and the pessimists can inject any number of tragedies tearing them apart with anger or tears.

On the other hand, another chapter lets us voyeurs enjoy a bit more of the characters we'v come to like.

I really enjoyed this one. It was like every middle-aged guy's fantasy come true!

Not so sure I'd want to see a sequel as the improbable nature of this romance with the large age difference and them being at very different points in their lives make a long-term relationship highly unlikely.

Think I'll just enjoy this little gem for itself. A BIG 5+ !

This is one of my favorites, I must have read it a half dozen times. Thank you for what you do!

Enough said. This was my first read, but suspect strongly that it will not be my last for this story, and certainly not for this author.

A Fantasy that just draws you in!

What a great story. I know others have said that a sequel may not be a good thing, but I, for one, would love to see a sequel. A commentor mentioned the age difference, that it might be problematic. I don’t think so. It’s only a twenty odd years or so difference. Not an insurmountable gap. However, sequel or not, thank you Member389 for a great story.

But the editing really sucked. Why did he take her tee shirt off when she had already taken it off! A few other places the story was not consistent. Spell check was OK but far too many little words were missing causing a change of thought from the story to the missing words. A final edit of your stories would pay off in spades.

The story was exciting and did not drag. Descriptions of each of the scenes made it easy to get mental pictures. The ending was not rushed and provided a conclusive enough end to not beg a sequel. Characters were well developed and were believable. Overall a very good submission and very entertaining. Keep up the good writing with a little more editing.

Great story with or without a sequel. I would love to read it if you write it. The plot was fairly well rounded without it being too unrealistic. I thought she was a little too forward in the beginning, but her bring a model and used to wearing little to no clothes explained that away. The little bit of background you provided kept it interesting and believable without getting boring. Overall, with some grammatical errors aside, you did a great job. Keep it up!

... that I could add anything more than has been said in the previous five reviews.

It was, quite frankly, a really good story!

A sequel would be nice, but it's not a necessity. It would be great to see the relationship grow even more but, other than modeling gigs, I don't know what the story line would be.

Probably why I am not an author.

Liked it enough to give it 5 Stars, and add it to my Favorites.😉

Thanks for a good read!

Just loved it, I hope it continues for a long time.

Perfect for a sequel

I loved reading this story. Very nice written, also the plot was good. I personally think the story could use a good conclusion. I mean it is a romance story :-)

And I agree with others, a “Part 2” would be very nice. But thanks very much for part one.

This story is every middle-aged, straight, single guy’s wet dream. Of course it’s too good to be true, but dammit, we can all still dream! As far as spelling, punctuation, and other editing niceties, the hell with it. It’s the idea that’s important here, the whole concept. I think anybody who gets hung up on “perfect editing” just doesn’t get it. Thanks go to the author, Member389. Oh, and as so many others have said, a sequel would be so nice.

What a lovely story, it's got humor, sex and love all tied up into one beautiful erotic package. I think that another chapter, which there isn't so far, would spoil the magic of this one. It's like all the stars lined up perfectly and it happened and then it was over. Not a sad ending because both parties were helped through their rough spots and were able to move on with their lives. Well done!

What a wonderful and warm love story. Story was well written and really really deserves a conclusion with that happily ever after. Well done 5 stars

Great story,where's the rest

Part 2 will be in Loving Wives Category am sure

So wonderful! Even gives old Al the thought that someone might need a place to crash for a bit. <g>. Seriously , just a wonderful feel good story. More of them are absolutely needed! Nobody wants to read about broken homes, abuse and the like. This was feel good the whole way!

Thank you for the good fellings.

Nice, slow build, soft easy loving, mutual enjoyment. The sex is always better when there's love to. good story.

One sentence bugged me:

She pushed forward pressing me into her hands as I thumbed the nipples gently at first before turning them between my fingers.

Joey is very unprofessional. rest of it was a good love story

How is this romance!! Seems Jess set out to seduce him from the outset!!

A very fun, believable read. I had a smile on my face from page on. Loved the humor. Thank you.

Well done. Excellent timing and storyline. Humor was well thought out and the characters were true to form.

Kudos!

Good story!

5

Sweet story but maybe include some adversity to spice things up a bit.

Read it once, read it 5 times it is still such a sweet dream. To perfect characters.

Sweat broke out on my brow. Hands shaking. Reminds me of when my wife and I first got together. Now THAT would be a story to put into print. But she would kill me.

Thanks for the story.

What do you mean no adversity? He burned the toast didn't he?

What can I say another great story well written and well though out my very favorite Author.

When she reaches sexual prime and ready to rock and roll, he will be ready to roll over and go to sleep.

Surprisingly well written story with good character development. And, You know the difference between a body shudder and a window shutter. So many authors do not know the difference. Also you take care to check other spelling and grammar so that the reader is not jarred when these are encountered. Well done,

Anonymous doesn't like older men and younger women as he assumes the man is ready to roll over. At 79 years old I can say that is a bunch of hooey.

Great story.

Could use a part two. Maybe a run in with the Ex so she sees what she was replaced with! 5 stars

you write a very good story

Dommage, on ne sait pas si elle restera avec lui.

One of the best stories I've ever read here. Unlikely but that's what a good amount of fiction is. Very well written by an articulate and insightful person. Bravo. Brava. As the case may be.

Well done!

Outstanding!

Very nice. Well done