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The Contrast Ch. 06

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by Anonymous06/24/14

Please proofread

You missed a lot of little words

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by Anonymous06/24/14

Going well

The story is moving along well and I am enjoying the main characters, although this chapter was quite short.
As English is obviously not your native language, you should think about an editor.

As a general comment re the use of English in this forum, it's odd but a large number of authors have no idea that clothes (with an "e") are the garments you wear and cloths are for wiping and cleaning . Also people shudder not shutter as so many authors write.

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by Anonymous06/25/14

please go on!

Very nice story...I`d like to read some more actually :-)

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