by ABSTRUSE
That was very hot, I would try to give you some suggestions but you did it perfect. The being locked in was great and the sex was well done.
I liked the fantasy of being locked in, but you should describe what the characters and settings look like so we can get an image in our heads. I loved the idea of the main character being seduced by a more powerful employee. There could have been more sex though. A few spelling/gramatical errors. Otherwise, not too shabby.
Really enjoyed this story. Good characterisation and dynamic in such a short piece and very sexy!
I want to see their relationship develop and know more about who they are before they get to the sex. I don't think many people agree with me about that, though.
WOOOOWWW....THE STORY IS WAY TOO GOOD...AFTER
A LONG TIME I GOT TO READ A STORY WHICH IS NEITHER COPIED NOR HAS ANY CONTENT WHICH DIRECTLY INDICATES IN VERY FIRST HALF THAT THE STORY IS FAKE.... So I JUST LOVED THE CREATIVE STORY.