I rarely comment on an individual chapter, I prefer to see the whole story before commenting. However, this story so far is beginning to look like a good one. I do look forward to seeing how you further develop this, hoping you continue the well written, well developed story!
Only four stars since it's not finished yet. But absolutely loved the build-up and good writing skills. Please don't make me wait too long for the rest of this story!!!
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I rarely comment on an individual chapter, I prefer to see the whole story before commenting. However, this story so far is beginning to look like a good one. I do look forward to seeing how you further develop this, hoping you continue the well written, well developed story!
Love the details
Excellent description of the bodies and love the tension build. Keep it going!
Oh Yeah....
Only four stars since it's not finished yet. But absolutely loved the build-up and good writing skills. Please don't make me wait too long for the rest of this story!!!
hot
This story line is really well developed. It is one of the hottest tales I have thus far read. I am looking forward to reading the rest of this story.
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