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Subway Girl Ch. 04

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by Anonymous

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by Sid060406/21/14

Thank you...

I'm enjoying your story and looking forward to reading more. You write very well. Thank you for sharing.

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by SplendidSpunk06/21/14

Just keep getting better

I love how you are 'waking' Ray up and bringing him back to the world he lives in while for the past year he was just trying to survive. The story from the start has had a certain quality to it, a 'romantic' side that wasn't overdone, just kind of hovering in the back drop. It's also nice to see Alicia blossom when she is with Ray, she seems to be 'waking up' too. Top marks for this beautiful, dramatic and yes romantic story of a city and two people. I look forward to the next Chapter knowing that you will once again challenge and reward our diligence in following this story! Thank you

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by dbz5017206/21/14

True love

What a great story and really interesting characters. I really can't wait to see their love grow as the story continues.

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by Sidney4306/21/14

Agree that this is a really interesting story line with good characters. Looking forward to the next posting.

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by Anonymous06/21/14

Thanks

I am enjoying your story. Thank you for sharing it.

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by Anonymous06/21/14

purely awesome!!

I just love your story!! Keep 'em coming! :)

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by arrowglass06/21/14

UMMMMMMMMM!!!!!!!

This story is like savoring a fine wine...enjoying the subtleties...getting to know it!

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by Artofromance06/21/14

Such an endearing couple

You are weaving a beautiful romance. Your pacing, character development, writing style keeps your fans impatiently waiting for more. Congratulations on a great story

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by OldGeek06/21/14

Really like the character development...

...particularly (so far) Ray. I wonder what Alicia's shyness is caused by? Are you ever going to let us know?

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by connoisseur2906/22/14

****

Different. Entertaining. Good writing and reading. Thank you. Cheers!

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by firemanlit06/22/14

Enjoyable story. Well written, no obvious spelling, punctuation or grammatical errors. I still want the start of a story to let us know how many installments and when the story will be finished.

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by Anonymous06/29/14

Really enjoying this

No idea why I started to read it but delighted I did.

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by GaiusPetronius07/01/14

Better and better!

Alicia is a credit to the human race, and so is the one whose mind and heart created her.

I was so tickled to hear Ray call himself "a really lovable p____ o_ s___."

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by wantonmiss07/05/14

Enchanting

Such a sweet upbeat story, a modern day fairy tale xx

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Loved this instalment!

Gorgeous! It's real and it's contemporary and it's dreamy and it's lovely.

Just double check 'quite' vs. 'quiet' :)

Thanks!

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by Kookaburra806/06/15

what can I say

I think all the previous comments says it all..another 5 star chapter from me

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by bruce2207/22/15

I have to agree that Alicia is an amazing person.

We can hope for more background on her? Our lovable pile should be off the
bottom rung if he keeps working...

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by magpieolas03/15/16

Love it!

I love all of your stories, but i think this is my favorite. Thank you!

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by 1WrongRight03/15/16

Hey now

You've made me a better reader. I'm actually scoring each chapter (all 5's...but you knew that.) I usually wait until I finish a story, which means only the last chapter gets the gold (hey LIT what about that, a separate scoring box for multi-chapter stories?) Anyway, loving the characters, enjoying the story. Thanks DB

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by rightbank06/05/16

This could also be called the awakening

His growing self awareness is refreshing. Let's hope his finances become more stable before rent is due.

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