Eva and Daddy Ch. 03

Well developed

Fever

I am enjoying this very much and love the way you are bringing this situation along. You give Daddy the right amount of control and the daughter the right amount of pure lust. You style is very good and I do hope that when they get together it will be as slow and sensuous as the lead in has been. I look forward to seeing how you eventually get Daddy to unleash and take his daughter. Thanks for a beautifully written and well thought out piece - Kevin

You were bang on

Before Chapter 2 you said this story was hardly original, but as every chapter has shown that doesn't stop it being a fine and hot piece of writing. Looking forward to Chapter 4 very much!

a great read

I loved everything.. The development of the story makes for a good read.. I have read many stories on here but a few have ever given me the impression of developing into a novel.. But this has.. I simply love it.

Actually literate!

Too many stories here, while fine in conception, are marred by clunky writing. Bad grammar is a distraction and a turn-off! This is nicely written, which allows me to immerse myself in the action. Thank you for caring enough to proof-read!

Enjoyable

I am enjoying the pace of this story and the writing to!! Can't wait for ch.4!

Your writing is extremely nice to read and enjoy, you put time an effort into i and the end result was a sexy story!

Can't wait for the next chapter...hurry up please!

Very good! I'm hooked!

Very hot, very well written...hurry with the next chapter already!

Thanks everyone!

Sorry for not replying to your comments earlier, but thank you everyone for all of the positive feedback. I'm sorry it took me so long to finish the story, but Chapters 4 and 5 are live and running, and 6 should be up tomorrow. Thanks again, and I'm always happy to hear your constructive criticisms (and, oh shucks, I'm a sucker for praise :P)

The tease continues!!