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Great first attempt
Wow - great writing for a first timer. I loved the friction and for me the pace was about perfect. I'm not a big fan of unrealistic multiple orgasmic meetings and it is great to see a writer understanding what is physically possible. Things that might happen are always more alluring than things that are not. Keep it up!
No
That covers it
Yes, please continue ...
... and don't pay too much attention to those who snipe at you from the protection of anonymity. Welcome to Literotica and thank you for writing this opening chapter for us; I enjoyed it very much and I would love to read more.
You write well, so keep writing; as you say, it is the only way to improve. Five stars from me.
Please write more!
This is the best story I have seen on Literotica for ages. In fact I have been close to giving up on visiting regularly because of the lack of good content.
I love the realistic depiction of two sexy people who are both frustrated by the lack of response from their partners, and who both decide to do something about it. I also loved the scene with Laura blatantly and sexily masturbating in bed alongside her husband, who was clearly turned on by what she was doing but didn't do anything about it - lits of opportunity to expand on this.
One of the things that turns me on is people who are very open about their enjoyment of masturbation to another "wank buddy". I enjoy both intercourse and masturbation and in my view a great sexual relationship includes both, with freedom and encouragement to do both.
So YES please, more on this very promising and very sexy start. A great read!
Nice work
Good pacing, nice relatable storyline, most certainly deserving continuation.
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