Who's in Charge?

And his wife is going to be OK with this

Now that he's had sec with the mother, I hope they have both ruined their relationships with Bev. This is out of control.

This is a train wreck

His Mother-in-law WILL tell his wife. SO he's about to be divorced and probably jailed. I'm thinking the wife has Mom go to the hospital and have a rape kit done. Hubby is going to jail for assault, battery and rape. While he's in jail, Bev divorced him, winning all the assets. He's toast because he can't control his anger. Not a good decision. Not a good story.

Haha what a dumb story. How do you fuck someone you despise?

THAT MAY WORK SHORT TIME AND TERM

but so much can/could/will go amok. TK U MLJ LV NV

For the next chapter

Aim for a little more characterization of the MIL. Maybe get into her psychology: why she got off on being dominated and how she feels guilty, etc.

I Guess, I am different.....

Because unlike the other comments, I liked the story. Do I think things will go bad? I have no idea, just like the other commenters have no idea, since YOU are writing the story. I hope he doesn't, but only you know for sure.

Hi! I just wanted to let the readers and the people that have left comments know that this is my first story. I just wanted to give it a try at writing one. It is not real, purely fantasy. I am grateful for the feedback as i hope it will help me improve for the future.
Thanks for reading.
Fray

Good Read***

I lot of wishful thinking going on with this story. Some will not get past the part where the hands were around the throat!!! lol Thanks for sharing.

good first effort

great story out of the gate. the emotion and passion were palpable. keep up the good work.

For a first effort

For a first effort, it was good. It was well written. I didn't find any glaring errors (and they usually stick out to me). I just think that the son was dumb to actually have sex with the mother-in-law. The daughter has to find out. I do want to read a second chapter though to find out what happens in the morning.

Gratutitous blow jobs

He oughta make her suck his dick on a continous basis, always denying it to the missus. I mean, it IS a fantasy, right?

good first effort

I agree with those who praised your first effort. You didn't rush the story too much and you let it run only a slight bit too quickly. I particularly liked that you made it clear and kept it that way that he was having sex with her in a punitive way; you may wish to explore next time if this continues as to whether he gets much pleasure in addition to pure payback out of the sex with Janet. Pay no attention to those who would have you write a story with the plot they rather than you had in mind.

A Good Start

But what's wifey going to say when she finds out?

lesliejones

Of course he got pleasure out of it; he got a nut, didn't he? That very nut that he enjoyed depositing into her could be used against him if Mom takes it in her head to run a rape kit. That's why blow jobs would be the way to go. Just sayin'.

Unlikely

Grabbing someones neck is usually considered one of the most alarming signs of close-relation violence being out of control. By the victim it will normally evoke strong mental and bodily negative reactions and emotions. Whatever hidden lust you may ascribe MIL, or whatsoever, it is highly unlikely that she immediately after all this neck grabbing shall enjoy intercourse with the perpetrator.

Not worth reading.

This is so pathetic it stinks.

HELL YEAH

I thought it was great!!!!!!!!!!! Left the door wide open for part 2 too. BEND THAT BITCH OVER AND TAKE THE RENT OUT OF HER ASS