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the sounds
And imagery in this support each other like a finely crafted house, this is brilliant and evocative Desejo! onomatopiea is running through this to the point I can almost feel the scene,
The interlocking of hips, ripped
Shoulder river,
branches, machetes,
Even the entry of gunned words, and weapons on hips,
everything spoken in Congo river gurgling
over wet rocks and discarded tin cans
up and down
and up again
Kwasa, Kwasa
Can almost here the river , googled kwasa
A dance rhythm Which leads into your next stanza perfectly
Street nd feet are perfectly placed to enhance the sound and rhythm,
The sibilance works so well here too
.final line is so textured.
Sincerely a gushing fan boy hahaha
*****
Five.
Great writing
So colorful you can see it quite clearly. I like the ending image best of all, the wet earth covered feet.
5ed
one wonders about the future given the past.
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