That was great and satisfying. Want more. What will he make her do next?
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Anonymous06/27/14
Seriously good
Just stumbled across this site after reading some "published" erotica that left me bored and wanting better. You're better than people who are making money from their stories. Well done.
Thank you both, for the encouraging words. I have another scene or two for this story and am working on another longer multiple chapter submission. I look forward to more feedback so that I can get better.
You would never guess this was your first submission. VERY well written. You can tell you took the time to edit properly and thought out the story line before writing. I so hope we read more of your writings soon!!! I`d love to know if this is a chapter of a longer story and if so, what do the other chapters contain.
Thank You Anon for the high praise. This will be a three part series with a Deux and Trois to follow. I am almost done with part two. It will cover some more anal training and double penetration. Trois will be about a threesome with a bit of a twist that I hope people will enjoy. I am a horrible perfectionist so editing takes me a long time. I am also plotting out a 10-14 chapter story, that will cover a reluctant group situation.
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Anonymous10/20/14
Excellent job
I really enjoyed your story. You are a great story teller. I would love to know more about the characters and how they originally got together. It's important to me to have more information regarding whether they are in a public or private venue. That's just me though. Looking forward to the next part.
English
Satisfied
That was great and satisfying. Want more. What will he make her do next?
Seriously good
Just stumbled across this site after reading some "published" erotica that left me bored and wanting better. You're better than people who are making money from their stories. Well done.
Thanks!
Thank you both, for the encouraging words. I have another scene or two for this story and am working on another longer multiple chapter submission. I look forward to more feedback so that I can get better.
Good
Very good in fact.
Please write more.
Awesome
You would never guess this was your first submission. VERY well written. You can tell you took the time to edit properly and thought out the story line before writing. I so hope we read more of your writings soon!!! I`d love to know if this is a chapter of a longer story and if so, what do the other chapters contain.
Thank you so much for submitting this to be read!
Thanks!
Thank You Anon for the high praise. This will be a three part series with a Deux and Trois to follow. I am almost done with part two. It will cover some more anal training and double penetration. Trois will be about a threesome with a bit of a twist that I hope people will enjoy. I am a horrible perfectionist so editing takes me a long time. I am also plotting out a 10-14 chapter story, that will cover a reluctant group situation.
Excellent job
I really enjoyed your story. You are a great story teller. I would love to know more about the characters and how they originally got together. It's important to me to have more information regarding whether they are in a public or private venue. That's just me though. Looking forward to the next part.
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