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I read your bio, for a so called well educated black woman you have NO idea, grammar is part of being well educated even when talking but as is typical with black people including yourself is these attitudes and they way they act and talk and it comes across plain as day in your writing too, you may want to go back to school because clearly you learned nothing. 1*

Good Read*****

Thanks for sharing.

Good start

Is there more? Seemed like an abrupt ending. Bria and Alexis, are they coming back into the story? If so, it is a good start.

Yes, this is the first part of a series.

Anon, don't you know the difference between dialogue and story text? If it's written in quotation marks, that means it's dialogue, meaning that a character is saying it, meaning that the way the character speaks is reflected by the writing, including grammar. Get off your high horse, and learn a thing or two about writing style before you try to talk smack.

To anonymous

Before you gripe about an authors grammar - go get some lessons on grammar and punctuation yourself. Very rarely is a comment so badly punctuated as yours is. Your entire comment is punctuated to be one long rambling sentence, and even then it is without the commas that would have made sense out of it. I don't claim to be an English expert, but even I know that commas and full stops have purpose. May I recommend that you find out what and use them correctly.