Cinna

wtf

Don't get the end or what happen needs more information. I sit here going what ? Like it just didn't get the way it ended.

Bear naked...

... seriously? As for the story, I found it confusing. Best I can tell, her "love" (husband? Boyfriend?) was pissed about her doing some modelling and decided to fake her death and take her as his slave for some kind of retribution. That about it?

Outstanding! Puts the Literature into Literotica!

Seldom have I read a story with the power and impact of this one, and done in so few words, too! A single page of Lit writing was all Ellie needed to craft this tale which twists at the end with the skill of horror writer (think Poe or Lovecraft, my friends). Remarkable writing that deserves to be read slowly and savored. GREAT JOB!

Wow. I'm pleasantly surprised. This is darker than I would have expected from you.

It's black, in a lot of ways. I like it.

It's sparse, a little creepy, with an uncomfortable intimacy, a personal closeness. I think it makes great use of the "letters and transcripts" category, which is a hard one to do, and is an excellent take on the "Nude Day" theme. Not the art model bit. That will be common, I'm sure, but in the way the main character is "uncovered" and "revealed". It is dishonesty and truth as clothing and nudity. It's a double entendre, and a good one.

This was nicely done. Classy. I'm not sure your scores will be great--it has a lot of elements that hurt votes and is missing the fluff that people sometimes search for. It won't make people feel good, but it's artful, ambitious, and challenging, and, to me, that is worth a lot more than a high score.

Deep and dangerous. One of my favorite things I have read by you.

Off-putting Italics

I'm no expert but don't you use italics to highlight something or express brief inner thoughts? I couldn't work out if you were trying to write an exhibitionist or BDSM story. This surely has no place in letters and transcripts.

Also, you badly need a copy editor as the mistakes are a problem for readers.

Being fairly new here, a friend suggested I check out your work and I have enjoyed your very good erotic stories. But 'Cinna' seems to me a self-indulgence where you try to write a 'stream of consciousness' post rather than a story.

I don't know if you and Bucky Duckman are the same or you pay her for sycophancy.

Always something different from Elliebabe.

Dark and twisted. Quite a departure from last year's Nude Day story!