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Felt like it was inspired by a pile of horse manure in the field
Just plain awful. Can NOBODY write a decent story anymore?
Sweet.
Well i thought it was sweet. An earnest fantasy about gender bending and young love.
Very sweet.
I enjoyed it, very sweet scene. Ignore the asshole below -- I'd like to see what HE'S written.
Quite Refreshing
What I loved about this story is the way the story of the tart slowly unfolded. Hope there is more to come.
Loved it!
Good story, good setting, Great sex.... Ignore the negative moron! You are very creative so go with that and make Ashley all she can be!!!!!
A fine beginning
My favourite stories are all about seduction and gradual transformation of the protagonist into who she/he really is destined to be (or realization of who she really is) without a headlong rush, in fact with some reluctance. For stroke stories (which are fine when you want them), I look for them in other categories.
I anticipate that we are going to be treated to a flashback explaining how Ashton became the Tart and when you have completed that, you will resume the thread and explain how the Tart becomes Ashley. I am very much looking forward to that, although I think I might have preferred to start at the beginning, with Ashton, and avoided the need for the flashback. But that can't be changed, so I'll be happy with what you serve us next -- the sooner the better.
One detail on the British setting: a private (i.e. upper class or upper-middle class) all-boys' school is perhaps more likely to play rugby ("rugger") than football. As they used to say, "Football is a sport of gentlemen played by ruffians, rugby a sport of ruffians played by gentlemen." It has the advantage of providing a great deal of groping activity, if you want to include that as an element of titillation.
Very good!
I liked it a lot! It's an interesting idea. I'm eagerly anticipating further installments in this series. =)
Loved it
Hope to see more :)
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