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by drmac10007/04/14

Getting there.

Writing from a 'god' point of view is difficult and can be confusing to the reader. This was pretty good, but was bit hard to keep up with. Try another perspective.

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by hafnium1007/08/14

thanks for the observation .. this is a really tough point of view and I did have some trouble .. hope it didnt interfere with you enjoying the story though .. thanks again for commenting

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