Just such a story as I like ending up in an element of surprise. Well written too.
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Anonymous07/04/14
bad surprise
The story was going great till the last paragraph! Which was a massive turnoff. Nothing boils my blood like a wishy washy girl that jumps at the first rock shoved under her nose!
Not at all expecting that ending, but I really enjoyed the story. One thing I know for sure is I'm wet ;) I really liked your writing style and the humor that is injected within the story. As a reader I always try to see if I can relate, and I definitely could. Her naitivity along with her curiosity; her shyness vs her desire. I may not be 100% comfortable being that brazen, but it speaks to the inner goddess in most women. That's what makes fantasy though. If he loved her though as he said, I wish he would've fought for her or atleast seemed hurt by just being somewhat tossed aside.
Very good! I thouroughly enjoyed myself. Oh and I thought it was so erotic that he wanted to shave her! That is true intimacy if you ask me :)
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Unbelievable
Just such a story as I like ending up in an element of surprise. Well written too.
bad surprise
The story was going great till the last paragraph! Which was a massive turnoff. Nothing boils my blood like a wishy washy girl that jumps at the first rock shoved under her nose!
Oh my.....
Not at all expecting that ending, but I really enjoyed the story. One thing I know for sure is I'm wet ;) I really liked your writing style and the humor that is injected within the story. As a reader I always try to see if I can relate, and I definitely could. Her naitivity along with her curiosity; her shyness vs her desire. I may not be 100% comfortable being that brazen, but it speaks to the inner goddess in most women. That's what makes fantasy though. If he loved her though as he said, I wish he would've fought for her or atleast seemed hurt by just being somewhat tossed aside.
Very good! I thouroughly enjoyed myself. Oh and I thought it was so erotic that he wanted to shave her! That is true intimacy if you ask me :)
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