- All
Comments (4) - Add a
Comment - Send
Feedback Send private anonymous feedback to the author (click here to post a public comment instead).
| Literotica Toy Store ADULT TOY & DVD STORE FAST & DISCREET |
Literotica XXX Webcams 24/7 LIVE CAMS - FREE PREVIEW W/AUDIO! |
Literotica Adult Movies STREAMING ADULT MOVIES PAY PER MINUTE |
English
Like this a lot
This one I like a lot.
What is there to say. The images come and sandbag me. They string together in a pleasantly mad way. Further there does appear an weighty, overarching shape and direction to the poem. Very, very good – in my book anyway.
One quibble. I would have preferred commas after ‘heritage’ (?) and ‘needs’ in the eighth line. It wasn’t until I came back to the poem that I made (semantic) sense of that line. They would have helped me.
i am starting
To understand the way you write a little more with each reading, it is odd at times I am left so confused I may have read the cereal box in Swahili translation with a German accent, but lately I have been picking up you'd jive.
If cleardaynow and trix hadn't been commenting I probably never would. The way you mash and twist imagery in phrasal rhythm is very interesting, I enjoyed this, but to me it had more erotic overtones than not, or I'm just dirty minded and misinterpreting :-p
Some
elements of the erotic. A little burst of fire. thanks for the comments.
THERE MAY BE AN OPTION
select another card, TK U MLJ LV NV
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission! or
Back to Ace of Clubs or
More submissions by susansnow.