Vicky Ch. 01

location

you do not give your location but you write as an american.
you use the verb to lie(tell an untruth ok) but it also means to lie down- to lie in- and not the verb to lay all the time.again you use gotton instead of become.you need to brush up.

Way to start!

Nice beginning. A little hard-to-believe of a mother, but she does get your point across.

With luck you'll make a good serial out of this. It'll be fun to see a younger guy work his way through an even-younger-woman's mind.

grammer, what's grammer

i read your story out of sheer entertainment and i like or lust for your character and i'm anxious for more...

Please continue

You have left an image of a very lovely and sexy young woman who should find a lot of fun and pleasure if given the right opportunities, but might be very shy about finding those opportunities. Please keep going. This story can go in many directions that could include love, lust, sex, exposure, nudity. Incest even? Thank you for writing.

Author Comment

Peter- Thanks very much for the support. I agree the mother is above average in her forwardness and her blunt manner. Still, I have met older women like this, with a very matter-a-fact way of looking at life. I enjoy those people and wanted to include that personality in this story. Look for chapter 2 and 3 in the next week, maybe two depending on how long Literotica takes to approve the stories.

Anonymous- I've been working with editors on all my stories to try to prevent people from being frustrated by those sort of small details. I think some of my editors are english, so those US/UK things may slip by. I will try to be more aware though. Thanks

Lonely and Merdav- Thank you for your support and for commenting to show it. The support is a big driver for my continued writing, always has been. Thank you

Nicely done!

Thanks for sharing it with us.

You show every sign of being one hell of a writer. Keep on keeping on.