I don't know why it's called Mother's Little Helper first of all. Second of all, I don't think you really know how to write for women in their 30's. Sex toys are not thought of as old fashioned by any means and not knowing how to use one? That was almost laughable. The writing was decent except for a few spelling errors (than, then), however, the characters felt more like they were in their 50 or older. I feel as if this was written by someone who was older and not up to date on current sexual beliefs.
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nice!
every girl should have a caring aunt like that!
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I don't know why it's called Mother's Little Helper first of all. Second of all, I don't think you really know how to write for women in their 30's. Sex toys are not thought of as old fashioned by any means and not knowing how to use one? That was almost laughable. The writing was decent except for a few spelling errors (than, then), however, the characters felt more like they were in their 50 or older. I feel as if this was written by someone who was older and not up to date on current sexual beliefs.
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