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A bit disappointed!!!
The first chapter woz a good build up! U haven't mentioned the names of the mother daughter??? There hasn't been a slight resistance from any of them! I woz thinking they'll get beaten by the collector n maybe hav another male female trainee hav the professor in a threesome to show her place n let me remind u with a struggle while the collector trains the daughter in which he gets more information out about the mother in which he can take a upper hand in taking control! Get that fear in them so they don't disobey! Hav the collector suss out wot game plan the professor is playing! Hav the mother daughter beat each other up other wise face punishment! Don't have let them talking to each other! Make the chapters longer n put more detail in!
Needed to be a touch longer
But still good, a little more non con wouldn't go amiss either, i like the fact the professor is still plotting her escape, yet seeming to go along, i look forward to seeing how she acts on this and how he deals with it.
I await the next chapter to see where you take this well written story.
More, More, More
I'm not going to sit here and nit pick your work. All I'm going to say is that I think it's the best story you've done so far. I'm waiting to see where it goes. So please don't stop tell us more about what happens. As I said....More, More, More.
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No more storie?
You Could Easily Make More
Come on dude, you write the beginning and leave us hanging? I expect more than this
Patience
All stories will be completed, but I do have a life to attend to, so I can't give you a firm timeframe.
Mechanics
Nice serie beginning, but if the writting style is really okay, facts are a too mechanically set, much more like on a storyboard. Imo it would be more convincing with more detailled feelings.
Thanks for writting!
Great!
I've been waiting quietly in the wings for a while, but now I need to comment in order to get you to pen another chapter. Please pen another chapter!
No more stories?
You should do one chapter stories if you don't want to finish them later
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