You took your time with this story and crafted it very well. Congratulations on keeping my attention right to the end.
A very well done story that made me sometimes feel I was in the room with them. The injection of humor always seemed to be at just the right time, offering his sister money made me laugh and her response just made me chock on my coffee and spend the next five minutes cleaning my keyboard.
Well done with this story and keep up the great work your doing.
by
Anonymous07/12/14
Amazing
Perfect, even. I have no criticisms, no suggestions. Just...perfect.
by
Anonymous07/12/14
Woah
Woah dude I had two orgasms reading this oh my god (I'm female)
Choosing a story to read is frequently one of the most interesting parts of my day. Maybe it will be great, maybe it will be terrible. But this one... This one I put into a different category.
The best damn story I have ever read on this website. It was beautiful, taboo, enticing, sexy, sweet, emotional... It was everything.
Just as in your "Uncomplicated" series, you bring a story to life in a way that brings the reader into the page. I am delighted with your use of language, the skillful artistry with which you use the words to create a very moving and intense story.
I was most impressed with Sean's and Dani's realization of their love, and the conflict of their upbringing, and final breaking through to give themselves to each other fully.
Well done. Please continue to give us new stories, or continue with your existing stories. You are a writer of considerable talent, graced by a muse to put thoughts, emotions, feelings and actions into well written words.
by
Anonymous07/12/14
6 stars
Very well crafted, best reading by far. Well done :)
by
Anonymous07/12/14
amazing
Best story I have come across this section, this site or any other site till date.... the quality here is awesome... you could be writing novels... bravo!!!....
This is highest pinnacle of brother-sister incest storytelling. There is never a false note nor is their a detail out of place. This is fine erotic writing at its best. Dr. Hook is to be congratulated on a superb story.
Well written. I like how you almost painfully extended the scenes. Also, props on the dialog. Nothing seemed forced and wooden. I like how you refrained from having the siblings refer to each other as, "brother", "sister", "bro" & "sis". The readers know what they are already, they don't need to be reminded with a sledgehammer.
The only negative for me is that Sean didn't fuck her perfect ass.
Tremendous! Possibly the longest sex session I've read on this site, and one of the most detailed. Also the fullest of the awareness of what the siblings knew was condemned by society, yet needed by them to extend their love beyond mere sibling affection. The emotion was almost unbearable, but OH so beautiful. 5* ad inf.
This story is the Gold Standard of erotic writing. So many others have so eloquently and accurately describe this effort that all I can did is simply agree with them. Now I'm going to read the Uncomplicated as well as your other submissions.
Thank you for showing so many others how it's done properly.
by
Anonymous07/12/14
Simply blown away
Words cannot describe the beauty of this story. But I shall certainly try. I've read many incest stories on here involving brother and sister but none so exquisitely written. The attention to detail makes the story more sensual, and when there was no previous mention of either of them having stronger feelings for each other before they proceeded to explore their love makes it all the more forbidden and therefore, hightens the passion. I believe you have truly captured the essence of brother/sister taboo in this short story. Congratulations! You should be proud
by
Anonymous07/13/14
oh my god
Thankyou for such an amazing story. I laughed, i cried and i got off on this story. I felt their pain and their absolute love for one another. Everything was written so well.
Please whatever you do please let them end up together because i feel so much for them i cant bare it if they are not together in the end.
THANK YOU. I personally absolutely love brother and sister love stories and I've read a lot and even tried my hand at writing one but your treatment of this story sets the standard by which they should all be written. Their inexorable fall into love was paced extremely well and deliciously described. I have just one suggestion. It would have satisfied my curiosity to read about what happened to the boyfriend and girlfriend. But, that's just me. Thanks again. Well worth the 5 I gave.
by
Anonymous07/13/14
Amazing
A truly amazing story. Without a doubt one of the best erotica I've ever read.
by
Anonymous07/13/14
Absolutely wonderful!
Not only a truly first-rate story, but superbly written. All the things the other comments have already said . . . I simply run out of vocabulary unless I repeat the others! Are you a professional writer? (You can't possibly be an amateur!)
And that's just what the writer did. Slowly and surely he joined this brother and sister together. The way it was written we all knew they were meant to be. The writing shows the insight the author has into a relationship of this type. Not easy to get behind the minds of the participants but he did it beautifully. Congratulations on work of art!
So very erotic.....I'll not tell you what it did to me.....blush!
by
Anonymous07/13/14
Wow!
I explored the website, found this, and when the story was introducing the characters, I thought, "This guy knows how to write!" This was by far the BEST erotica I have ever read! I absolutely love how slow the love took place. It wasn't a, 'Now you are fucking each other' type of story. Love it!!!
by
Anonymous07/13/14
just some of the things i liked a lot (spoilers)
1. The characters were fleshed out.
2. Not cliche scenarios
3. The detail descriptions of their emotions. I felt like i was there/them feeling their pain and love at the same time.
4. Instead of the brother doing the saving it is the sister this time. See 2.
5. The pacing was really really good and not filled with fluf.
6. The conflicting emotions they felt feels very real.
There are so many more other things. My heart really ache for both of them. More so with the sister. Her heart was in peices but she was even more devestated for her brother. Such is the loved she had for him. I have a real sister just like her. It just made it more real to me.
A well written passionate love story of the first order...would love to hear more about them!
by
Anonymous07/14/14
What's wrong with Society...
No, not the brother-sister incest, but the fact that a love such as this is considered unacceptable. Anything I could say about this story has already been written, so I will just add 'Excellent work'.
by
Anonymous07/14/14
Breathtaking storytelling
I've read a fair amount in this category for some time now, but nothing has moved me like this since "Colleen". Wow.
as someone who has more than a passing likeness to the people in this story i can confirm how erotic, passionate, intimate, and sexy thing to do, and seeing this story brings me all the qualities to the forefront of my mind, yes we know its taboo but it happens enjoy, thanks x
by
Anonymous07/14/14
"hot story"
This was a very hot story. I was hard all the way to the end. But way the end?
This should be the beginning. Please write more abouth thsi. Thank you.
This is a beautifully constructed tale of two siblings finally finding each others love told with a delicate and tender touch. The slow and gentle awakening of their desire for each other was so touching and so beautiful that I had tears in my eyes by the end, something that very few tales on here have ever done to me except maybe for the Colleen trilogy. The attention to detail was just right, enough for us to know who and what they were but not enough to overbear us and the conflicting emotions of overwhelming love against the guilt that societies norms put upon them were just perfect.
The language was often exquisite in it's use, perfectly placed to heighten the growing desire and attraction they felt; the very limited used of strong, sexual language making it all the more effective. This is definitely the most successful one act sibcest story I have read on here needing no extra back story or former desires for each other, just the knowledge that they had always been close being enough to build from. It was a delight that they acted in equal measure, no one dominating the other as the story progressed; each wanting to console, please, satisfy and finally love the other fully.
The characters are carefully crafted and fleshed out enough to make us actually care about them; something very unusual in a one off story. Their inner selves show them to be caring, gentle souls and totally believable as the main protagonists in this story. I especially enjoyed the almost chivalrous denial of his own desires that Sean displays as their physical relationship develops so that his sister Dani never has reason to feel uncomfortable; a male character is rarely portrayed with such sincere emotions as this in erotic tales and even less so in this category.
So, an enjoyable, highly emotional, erotic LOVE STORY that rates as among the best on this site all told. As to should there be more; well the door was left open and to me even at the most basic level it would be a shame to waste such wonderful characters by leaving it here but I must admit I would hate to see any reprise be anything other than a complete consummation of their loving relationship with a fulfilling future for them, to me anything less would be a travesty. It is a story like this that everybody should be made to read before they dare condemn the taboo nature of relationships like this; how can such a deep love be anything but right and just?
Sorry for such a long ramble and THANK YOU so much for this story, it was truly wonderful and your style is eminently readable and inspiring; I hope that others read it and learn from it (including me!).
Out of the many many brother and sister incest stories available here, this one seems quite believable. ..and yes the ending too is quite innovative. If u feel like u could end it here or carry it on as a series. ...good stuff
For me, the "Colleen" series is the greatest love story I've read on here. That's a trilogy - in this single episode, you have joined the elite. Congratulations. Five stars doesn't do it anywhere near justice.
"With every sweet touch of tongues, with every trail of kisses left down the side of one's face, with every gentle nibble of an earlobe, and with every soft breath in an ear accompanied by the indiscernible, not-quite-audible utterance of the three beautiful words lovers use, the delicate, forbidden pleasure of their love was revealed to the two siblings. How far they would let it go had yet to be discovered."
How rare to encounter such beautiful, astonishing writing on this site...or anywhere. It is as beautiful as the love you describe. So powerful. The absolute definition of erotica.
No where have I been so satisfied with the believeability of this touching brother/sister relationship. Your use of the written word without being overly descriptive of this one beautiful act of intercourse is absolutely mind boggleing. I salute your ability to convey love between a man and a women in its purest form'
by
Anonymous07/31/14
Applaud
Now, that's a story... I felt like I was reading a book that I bought from Barnes and Nobles or something. The writing, the settings, the details, the character development.... I literally forgot that it was an erotica... at least until the erotic parts. This is my first time ever posting a comment on here and you, sir, you deserve it. If I ever find a novel or something written by you, no matter what the genre is, I'll be sure to get it.
don't let them part upon returning to the mainland
they should let their relationship flourish.
by
Anonymous08/11/14
I want part 2!!!!!
Please sir, do a follow up on this story!!!! This is the best story I have ever read on this site!!! I can assure you that I'm not telling this at the spur of the moment..... Your writing is just like drugs, once you take them...it's hard to leave it. And I don't think that incest is a criminal offense.... If two persons are deeply in love, what right does even law have to separate them? Please sir, I beg you, please fulfill our wishes by writing part 2!!! Please, please, please!!!!!!
by
Anonymous08/27/14
More!!!!
Please more! Best story I've read!
by
Anonymous09/17/14
pure artistry
This is so good, I'm at a loss for words. I think you should continue this story but it shouldnt be an erotica. Your wordings and character development gave a good foundation for a novel about the mental stress that situation put on their daily lives. I'd gladly read a well written, less erotic story about how these two coped
One night simply isn't enough, you need to get started on a second chapter! This story is far too good to end here. Tell us how they continue to explore and deepen their newly found aspect of their sibling love.
On a side note, my most preferred incestuous couples are twins or those with only one year of age difference between them; the next best scenario is an older sister/younger brother pairing, because the opposite always feels a bit coercive no matter how genuine their love is.
A long comment about a nearly forgotten advice column...
Hope you don't mind but this is probably going to be the longest comment I've ever posted here... First off, beautiful story; one of the best I've read on this site. Well written, sweet and loving while also being deeply erotic. Part of me agrees with some of the other commenters, who want to hear how these siblings will go forward with their new relationship when back in the "real world", but part of me likes the current open-ended, "walk off into the sunset" ending from an aesthetic standpoint.
If this story is continued, though, perhaps you might draw some inspiration from something I remember from, oh, nearly 20 years ago now; an old "Dear Abby" (or some other similar) advice column I remember glancing at in the newspaper while waiting for a bus back when I was in school. I think you'll agree that the overall setup for this story has a great deal of similarity to a letter from that column.
I remember the letter being from a woman who was passing along her concern about a secret confession which a close friend of hers had related in confidence. This girlfriend had explained to the letter-writer how, some years earlier, when she was in her early 20s and her brother in his early 30s, both of them had simultaneously gone through bad relationship endings. She had had a bad breakup with a boyfriend, and he an acrimonious divorce. After these travails, the siblings turned to one another for emotional support and, as in this story, after a tear-filled night of bemoaning both their love lives, their comforting of one another moved from the emotional to the sexual.
The letter writer was concerned, not only about the incest, but the fact that her friend had confessed that after that night of siblings' passion, their mutual attraction hadn't faded. Although both siblings had moved on in their lives and were both now married to other partners, the sister had confessed to the writer that she and her brother still met secretly in hotels for sex on average of once or twice a month or so, and had been doing so for years. The letter writer was asking for advice on how to tell her friend to break off this relationship, and seemed more concerned about the ongoing marital infidelity and deception of both siblings' spouses, than the surprising sibling incest angle.
I was really surprised, at the time, that such a letter would be written to, and answered by, a normal mass-media advice column (as I'm sure you'll admit, the background sounds more like a literotica story than fodder for a "Dear Abby" column). This surprise at the topic, as well as the autoerotic fantasies it subsequently engendered, caused it to stick in my mind all these years. And naturally, this story, having such a similar set-up, immediately brought its memory to mind again.
I'll admit that my personal favorite imagined autoerotic scenario to come out of this setup was to imagine that the letter writer encouraged her friend to confess to her current spouse about this relationship; but after hesitantly doing so (while breaking down in tears because of her guilt over her very real feelings for her husband while still harboring the old secret desire for her brother), her husband would understand his wife's feelings and not insist on taking a hammer to this other side of her self. Instead, realizing the deep love that she also shared with her brother, he might ask that instead of simply breaking off the affair, that instead they share their love together. A similar confession and result on the part of the brother to his wife might leave the four of them, brother, sister, and their spouses, meeting up to all share new passions together as a group.
So, I mention all this because of the similarity in the setup of this real situation (we imagine -- could the letter writer be faking it? who knows...), and to raise one possible suggestion for how you might continue the story, should you choose to do so. In any case, thanks for a hot and sweet read!
Second reading, and I repeat my earlier comments. I would add that there is really no such thing as "Incest" in nature. it is a creation of politicians/priests who use it to give themselves power of others.
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Anonymous12/06/14
You rocked this genre..
You nailed it!! Please continue with this story!!!
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Anonymous01/12/15
More
Love the characters. Loved the sibling bond. Great story. But there should be more to you tell.
This is one of the best stories I have read on this site. The character development was perfect. The flow of the language throughout the story was superb. The point at which the story ended and the way in which it ended were masterful. I look forward to reading more of your work.
English
Dude...
This writing was fantastic. This is by far the best love story I have ever read on this site. 20 out of 10 my friend. Keep up the excellent writing.
Outstanding....
I thoroughly enjoyed this well crafted and totally absorbing story. I would love to read more on how their lives moved on from this point.
Well Done.
You took your time with this story and crafted it very well. Congratulations on keeping my attention right to the end.
A very well done story that made me sometimes feel I was in the room with them. The injection of humor always seemed to be at just the right time, offering his sister money made me laugh and her response just made me chock on my coffee and spend the next five minutes cleaning my keyboard.
Well done with this story and keep up the great work your doing.
Amazing
Perfect, even. I have no criticisms, no suggestions. Just...perfect.
Woah
Woah dude I had two orgasms reading this oh my god (I'm female)
Wow.
Choosing a story to read is frequently one of the most interesting parts of my day. Maybe it will be great, maybe it will be terrible. But this one... This one I put into a different category.
The best damn story I have ever read on this website. It was beautiful, taboo, enticing, sexy, sweet, emotional... It was everything.
Thank you.
Exceptional
Just as in your "Uncomplicated" series, you bring a story to life in a way that brings the reader into the page. I am delighted with your use of language, the skillful artistry with which you use the words to create a very moving and intense story.
I was most impressed with Sean's and Dani's realization of their love, and the conflict of their upbringing, and final breaking through to give themselves to each other fully.
Well done. Please continue to give us new stories, or continue with your existing stories. You are a writer of considerable talent, graced by a muse to put thoughts, emotions, feelings and actions into well written words.
6 stars
Very well crafted, best reading by far. Well done :)
amazing
Best story I have come across this section, this site or any other site till date.... the quality here is awesome... you could be writing novels... bravo!!!....
Great!
Thanks for sharing.
Thank you
Exceptionally well done; erotic without excess.
Beautifully crafted story
Totally absorbed by this gently-paced, well-told story. Thanks for sharing.
Superbly Crafted, Wonderfully Told
This is highest pinnacle of brother-sister incest storytelling. There is never a false note nor is their a detail out of place. This is fine erotic writing at its best. Dr. Hook is to be congratulated on a superb story.
Great Story! 5 stars!
Well written. I like how you almost painfully extended the scenes. Also, props on the dialog. Nothing seemed forced and wooden. I like how you refrained from having the siblings refer to each other as, "brother", "sister", "bro" & "sis". The readers know what they are already, they don't need to be reminded with a sledgehammer.
The only negative for me is that Sean didn't fuck her perfect ass.
A Blast!
Tremendous! Possibly the longest sex session I've read on this site, and one of the most detailed. Also the fullest of the awareness of what the siblings knew was condemned by society, yet needed by them to extend their love beyond mere sibling affection. The emotion was almost unbearable, but OH so beautiful. 5* ad inf.
Simply superb!
This story is the Gold Standard of erotic writing. So many others have so eloquently and accurately describe this effort that all I can did is simply agree with them. Now I'm going to read the Uncomplicated as well as your other submissions.
Thank you for showing so many others how it's done properly.
Simply blown away
Words cannot describe the beauty of this story. But I shall certainly try. I've read many incest stories on here involving brother and sister but none so exquisitely written. The attention to detail makes the story more sensual, and when there was no previous mention of either of them having stronger feelings for each other before they proceeded to explore their love makes it all the more forbidden and therefore, hightens the passion. I believe you have truly captured the essence of brother/sister taboo in this short story. Congratulations! You should be proud
oh my god
Thankyou for such an amazing story. I laughed, i cried and i got off on this story. I felt their pain and their absolute love for one another. Everything was written so well.
Please whatever you do please let them end up together because i feel so much for them i cant bare it if they are not together in the end.
Thanks again. Wow.
BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN STORY OF BROTHER SISTER LOVE
THANK YOU. I personally absolutely love brother and sister love stories and I've read a lot and even tried my hand at writing one but your treatment of this story sets the standard by which they should all be written. Their inexorable fall into love was paced extremely well and deliciously described. I have just one suggestion. It would have satisfied my curiosity to read about what happened to the boyfriend and girlfriend. But, that's just me. Thanks again. Well worth the 5 I gave.
Amazing
A truly amazing story. Without a doubt one of the best erotica I've ever read.
Absolutely wonderful!
Not only a truly first-rate story, but superbly written. All the things the other comments have already said . . . I simply run out of vocabulary unless I repeat the others! Are you a professional writer? (You can't possibly be an amateur!)
Joining the two together
And that's just what the writer did. Slowly and surely he joined this brother and sister together. The way it was written we all knew they were meant to be. The writing shows the insight the author has into a relationship of this type. Not easy to get behind the minds of the participants but he did it beautifully. Congratulations on work of art!
So very erotic.....I'll not tell you what it did to me.....blush!
Wow!
I explored the website, found this, and when the story was introducing the characters, I thought, "This guy knows how to write!" This was by far the BEST erotica I have ever read! I absolutely love how slow the love took place. It wasn't a, 'Now you are fucking each other' type of story. Love it!!!
just some of the things i liked a lot (spoilers)
1. The characters were fleshed out.
2. Not cliche scenarios
3. The detail descriptions of their emotions. I felt like i was there/them feeling their pain and love at the same time.
4. Instead of the brother doing the saving it is the sister this time. See 2.
5. The pacing was really really good and not filled with fluf.
6. The conflicting emotions they felt feels very real.
There are so many more other things. My heart really ache for both of them. More so with the sister. Her heart was in peices but she was even more devestated for her brother. Such is the loved she had for him. I have a real sister just like her. It just made it more real to me.
Well done!
A well written passionate love story of the first order...would love to hear more about them!
What's wrong with Society...
No, not the brother-sister incest, but the fact that a love such as this is considered unacceptable. Anything I could say about this story has already been written, so I will just add 'Excellent work'.
Breathtaking storytelling
I've read a fair amount in this category for some time now, but nothing has moved me like this since "Colleen". Wow.
so erotic
as someone who has more than a passing likeness to the people in this story i can confirm how erotic, passionate, intimate, and sexy thing to do, and seeing this story brings me all the qualities to the forefront of my mind, yes we know its taboo but it happens enjoy, thanks x
"hot story"
This was a very hot story. I was hard all the way to the end. But way the end?
This should be the beginning. Please write more abouth thsi. Thank you.
more
This was a wonderful story... you should continue, i would love to see what the future holds for these two... great job
Delightful Tale!
This is a beautifully constructed tale of two siblings finally finding each others love told with a delicate and tender touch. The slow and gentle awakening of their desire for each other was so touching and so beautiful that I had tears in my eyes by the end, something that very few tales on here have ever done to me except maybe for the Colleen trilogy. The attention to detail was just right, enough for us to know who and what they were but not enough to overbear us and the conflicting emotions of overwhelming love against the guilt that societies norms put upon them were just perfect.
The language was often exquisite in it's use, perfectly placed to heighten the growing desire and attraction they felt; the very limited used of strong, sexual language making it all the more effective. This is definitely the most successful one act sibcest story I have read on here needing no extra back story or former desires for each other, just the knowledge that they had always been close being enough to build from. It was a delight that they acted in equal measure, no one dominating the other as the story progressed; each wanting to console, please, satisfy and finally love the other fully.
The characters are carefully crafted and fleshed out enough to make us actually care about them; something very unusual in a one off story. Their inner selves show them to be caring, gentle souls and totally believable as the main protagonists in this story. I especially enjoyed the almost chivalrous denial of his own desires that Sean displays as their physical relationship develops so that his sister Dani never has reason to feel uncomfortable; a male character is rarely portrayed with such sincere emotions as this in erotic tales and even less so in this category.
So, an enjoyable, highly emotional, erotic LOVE STORY that rates as among the best on this site all told. As to should there be more; well the door was left open and to me even at the most basic level it would be a shame to waste such wonderful characters by leaving it here but I must admit I would hate to see any reprise be anything other than a complete consummation of their loving relationship with a fulfilling future for them, to me anything less would be a travesty. It is a story like this that everybody should be made to read before they dare condemn the taboo nature of relationships like this; how can such a deep love be anything but right and just?
Sorry for such a long ramble and THANK YOU so much for this story, it was truly wonderful and your style is eminently readable and inspiring; I hope that others read it and learn from it (including me!).
Terrific Story.
Great writing. Thank you.
believable and promising
Out of the many many brother and sister incest stories available here, this one seems quite believable. ..and yes the ending too is quite innovative. If u feel like u could end it here or carry it on as a series. ...good stuff
Like a couple of others have said...
For me, the "Colleen" series is the greatest love story I've read on here. That's a trilogy - in this single episode, you have joined the elite. Congratulations. Five stars doesn't do it anywhere near justice.
Exquisite
"With every sweet touch of tongues, with every trail of kisses left down the side of one's face, with every gentle nibble of an earlobe, and with every soft breath in an ear accompanied by the indiscernible, not-quite-audible utterance of the three beautiful words lovers use, the delicate, forbidden pleasure of their love was revealed to the two siblings. How far they would let it go had yet to be discovered."
How rare to encounter such beautiful, astonishing writing on this site...or anywhere. It is as beautiful as the love you describe. So powerful. The absolute definition of erotica.
Best ever
No where have I been so satisfied with the believeability of this touching brother/sister relationship. Your use of the written word without being overly descriptive of this one beautiful act of intercourse is absolutely mind boggleing. I salute your ability to convey love between a man and a women in its purest form'
Applaud
Now, that's a story... I felt like I was reading a book that I bought from Barnes and Nobles or something. The writing, the settings, the details, the character development.... I literally forgot that it was an erotica... at least until the erotic parts. This is my first time ever posting a comment on here and you, sir, you deserve it. If I ever find a novel or something written by you, no matter what the genre is, I'll be sure to get it.
don't let them part upon returning to the mainland
they should let their relationship flourish.
I want part 2!!!!!
Please sir, do a follow up on this story!!!! This is the best story I have ever read on this site!!! I can assure you that I'm not telling this at the spur of the moment..... Your writing is just like drugs, once you take them...it's hard to leave it. And I don't think that incest is a criminal offense.... If two persons are deeply in love, what right does even law have to separate them? Please sir, I beg you, please fulfill our wishes by writing part 2!!! Please, please, please!!!!!!
More!!!!
Please more! Best story I've read!
pure artistry
This is so good, I'm at a loss for words. I think you should continue this story but it shouldnt be an erotica. Your wordings and character development gave a good foundation for a novel about the mental stress that situation put on their daily lives. I'd gladly read a well written, less erotic story about how these two coped
Most Erotic and Loving!
One night simply isn't enough, you need to get started on a second chapter! This story is far too good to end here. Tell us how they continue to explore and deepen their newly found aspect of their sibling love.
On a side note, my most preferred incestuous couples are twins or those with only one year of age difference between them; the next best scenario is an older sister/younger brother pairing, because the opposite always feels a bit coercive no matter how genuine their love is.
A long comment about a nearly forgotten advice column...
Hope you don't mind but this is probably going to be the longest comment I've ever posted here... First off, beautiful story; one of the best I've read on this site. Well written, sweet and loving while also being deeply erotic. Part of me agrees with some of the other commenters, who want to hear how these siblings will go forward with their new relationship when back in the "real world", but part of me likes the current open-ended, "walk off into the sunset" ending from an aesthetic standpoint.
If this story is continued, though, perhaps you might draw some inspiration from something I remember from, oh, nearly 20 years ago now; an old "Dear Abby" (or some other similar) advice column I remember glancing at in the newspaper while waiting for a bus back when I was in school. I think you'll agree that the overall setup for this story has a great deal of similarity to a letter from that column.
I remember the letter being from a woman who was passing along her concern about a secret confession which a close friend of hers had related in confidence. This girlfriend had explained to the letter-writer how, some years earlier, when she was in her early 20s and her brother in his early 30s, both of them had simultaneously gone through bad relationship endings. She had had a bad breakup with a boyfriend, and he an acrimonious divorce. After these travails, the siblings turned to one another for emotional support and, as in this story, after a tear-filled night of bemoaning both their love lives, their comforting of one another moved from the emotional to the sexual.
The letter writer was concerned, not only about the incest, but the fact that her friend had confessed that after that night of siblings' passion, their mutual attraction hadn't faded. Although both siblings had moved on in their lives and were both now married to other partners, the sister had confessed to the writer that she and her brother still met secretly in hotels for sex on average of once or twice a month or so, and had been doing so for years. The letter writer was asking for advice on how to tell her friend to break off this relationship, and seemed more concerned about the ongoing marital infidelity and deception of both siblings' spouses, than the surprising sibling incest angle.
I was really surprised, at the time, that such a letter would be written to, and answered by, a normal mass-media advice column (as I'm sure you'll admit, the background sounds more like a literotica story than fodder for a "Dear Abby" column). This surprise at the topic, as well as the autoerotic fantasies it subsequently engendered, caused it to stick in my mind all these years. And naturally, this story, having such a similar set-up, immediately brought its memory to mind again.
I'll admit that my personal favorite imagined autoerotic scenario to come out of this setup was to imagine that the letter writer encouraged her friend to confess to her current spouse about this relationship; but after hesitantly doing so (while breaking down in tears because of her guilt over her very real feelings for her husband while still harboring the old secret desire for her brother), her husband would understand his wife's feelings and not insist on taking a hammer to this other side of her self. Instead, realizing the deep love that she also shared with her brother, he might ask that instead of simply breaking off the affair, that instead they share their love together. A similar confession and result on the part of the brother to his wife might leave the four of them, brother, sister, and their spouses, meeting up to all share new passions together as a group.
So, I mention all this because of the similarity in the setup of this real situation (we imagine -- could the letter writer be faking it? who knows...), and to raise one possible suggestion for how you might continue the story, should you choose to do so. In any case, thanks for a hot and sweet read!
Second reading, and I repeat my earlier comments. I would add that there is really no such thing as "Incest" in nature. it is a creation of politicians/priests who use it to give themselves power of others.
You rocked this genre..
You nailed it!! Please continue with this story!!!
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Love the characters. Loved the sibling bond. Great story. But there should be more to you tell.
Great story
Loved the story, another chapter maybe
Thanks
Perfect!
This is one of the best stories I have read on this site. The character development was perfect. The flow of the language throughout the story was superb. The point at which the story ended and the way in which it ended were masterful. I look forward to reading more of your work.
excellent story please please continue
Perfection.
That you are able to use words to express this depth of unconditional love, inner conflict and deep eroticism in one story, is brilliant.
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