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I really enjoy these adventures of yours, just keep writing them the same way in my opinion.
Love the series, have given them all fives. However, PLEASE use the words "fun" and "crazy" less often.
These characters are well educated and well to do, they would use other words as befits their station.
Love this series!
More, more, more! Please keep them coming I love your stories.
Great SEX!!
I really enjoy these adventures of yours, just keep writing them the same way in my opinion.
To put it bluntly
Fuckin "A" plus!
hell yeah!
Please keep these stories coming! I feel sexy just reading them! Wish I could be one of your girls too!!!!
yes I love the storyline
I know some people might think that it's a drawn out story and they want just the sex but you are very good writer keep it going one day it might even be a book
Avidly reading.......
I stumbled across your story a few weeks ago and I am hooked. I find the reading very hot and I love the fact that the chapters are longer than just one or two pages. I also like that you chose to write in first person narrative with dialogue. This allows the reader to discover the voice and psychology of yourself, as expressed directly by the you, which gives immediacy and the sense of ‘being there’.
As for the details, again, I find this adds to the overall experience and realism. Especially since they are consistent and check out. The tantra chair is just as you describe.
My one critique is grammar and punctuation. Spell check will catch many spelling errors and I don't see a lot of those, but spell check cannot catch things like when you use the word "their" instead of "they're.
Please keep them COMING!!
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