I have to disagree with the previous comment. By beginning this tale when you did, you left open the possibility of covering the history of their romance told in flashbacks. And the ending leads right into the next chapter of the verse.
Well Done.
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Anonymous07/17/14
Reminds me of times more innocent.
Great story, huge buildup. The seemingly ignorant approach to their intimacy made it a tad bit humorous at times(the characters approach, not the authors). But I liked it alot and look forward, with anticipation, the continuation and backstory.
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Disappointing with NO history of how they met, for a romance story I would expect more than you posted here.
Perfect Beginning to tale.
I have to disagree with the previous comment. By beginning this tale when you did, you left open the possibility of covering the history of their romance told in flashbacks. And the ending leads right into the next chapter of the verse.
Well Done.
Reminds me of times more innocent.
Great story, huge buildup. The seemingly ignorant approach to their intimacy made it a tad bit humorous at times(the characters approach, not the authors). But I liked it alot and look forward, with anticipation, the continuation and backstory.
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