I agree this held much MUCH room for improvement but to the last comment--- derp? I'm unfamiliar with that phrase what does it mean?
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Anonymous07/19/14
Not awful but indeed the author should research writing a little more
By the way. 'Derp' loosely translates as 'I am a semi literate in bred half wit'. People use it to make their lack of intelligence readily apparent to others.
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Anonymous07/19/14
Disgusting story.
Pissing in someone's mouth, is far from sexy. Try another occupation.
Anon, while you and I may not practice water sports that doesn't that others don't AND they should be judged for doing so. Everyone and I mean everyone has their own kink, yours may be being tied up, being a dom or having someone pretend they are dead. (Hey like I said, everyone has a kink).
So lighten up. Someone will be writing something right up your alley in the near future.
typical trash for this site. piss poor writing, a writer that doesn't understand that incest HAS to be kept to just the relatives involved NO OUTSIDERS. we also have a stupid writer that FAILS to warn the readers of unusual content in the intro or subtitle. delete and rewrite it then post it in the NONEROTIC area it is a total turn off.
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Anonymous07/20/14
Warn!!!
Warn readers of the peeing!! Not everyone likes it.
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Anonymous07/21/14
fun lark
i found this story light and easy to read, with none of the heavy weather some writers raise around spme issues.
English
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Pure fucking garbage. Stop writing, you derp.
derp?
I agree this held much MUCH room for improvement but to the last comment--- derp? I'm unfamiliar with that phrase what does it mean?
Not awful but indeed the author should research writing a little more
By the way. 'Derp' loosely translates as 'I am a semi literate in bred half wit'. People use it to make their lack of intelligence readily apparent to others.
Disgusting story.
Pissing in someone's mouth, is far from sexy. Try another occupation.
Don't judge Anon
Anon, while you and I may not practice water sports that doesn't that others don't AND they should be judged for doing so. Everyone and I mean everyone has their own kink, yours may be being tied up, being a dom or having someone pretend they are dead. (Hey like I said, everyone has a kink).
So lighten up. Someone will be writing something right up your alley in the near future.
Correction to last
shouldn't not should
trash
typical trash for this site. piss poor writing, a writer that doesn't understand that incest HAS to be kept to just the relatives involved NO OUTSIDERS. we also have a stupid writer that FAILS to warn the readers of unusual content in the intro or subtitle. delete and rewrite it then post it in the NONEROTIC area it is a total turn off.
Warn!!!
Warn readers of the peeing!! Not everyone likes it.
fun lark
i found this story light and easy to read, with none of the heavy weather some writers raise around spme issues.
Wonderful
So nourishing and delicious, I enjoy eating my cum too!
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