My 19 yo twin sister and I usually read these stories out loud to each other and have never commented on grammar, editing, or spelling. And we are not going to start now. But there are a few things we do want to mention, perhaps so a future reader may not be mislead.
. Liz makes too big a deal about washing out her mouth after taking Gary's cum. Just spit and use mouthwash. It's not like she licked his dirty asshole.
. If his knuckles were stimulating your clit, then the tips of his fingers could not be stimulating the front wall of your vagina. Physically impossible.
. The sensitive spot, your g-spot, is not on the front wall of your uterus. You keep confusing vagina with uterus. The g-spot is on the upper wall of your vagina, just inside its opening.
. Your uterus is your womb, and he would not be inserting his fingers inside it. The uterus opening is protected by the cervix, and you could say "His cock hit her cervix" but that's where the bus backs up.
I did like that Liz has 34B boobs, not the fantasized DD that some stories have.
English
At least a 15!!!
I think you move to the head of the class as my favorite Literotica writer!!! Fabulous story and fantastic series. I love where this is headed!
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So incredibly arousing, and liberating
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My 19 yo twin sister and I usually read these stories out loud to each other and have never commented on grammar, editing, or spelling. And we are not going to start now. But there are a few things we do want to mention, perhaps so a future reader may not be mislead.
. Liz makes too big a deal about washing out her mouth after taking Gary's cum. Just spit and use mouthwash. It's not like she licked his dirty asshole.
. If his knuckles were stimulating your clit, then the tips of his fingers could not be stimulating the front wall of your vagina. Physically impossible.
. The sensitive spot, your g-spot, is not on the front wall of your uterus. You keep confusing vagina with uterus. The g-spot is on the upper wall of your vagina, just inside its opening.
. Your uterus is your womb, and he would not be inserting his fingers inside it. The uterus opening is protected by the cervix, and you could say "His cock hit her cervix" but that's where the bus backs up.
I did like that Liz has 34B boobs, not the fantasized DD that some stories have.
I'm sorry, Cindy, 1 Star, 1 Thumb Down.
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