Cheating can't never be hot....Her husband didn't show interest for her anymore, so she should have cleared all issues with him, before think in cheating...
You should expect a lot of flaming vitriol for writing a story that revolves around a cheating wife. That comes with the territory. Don't take it personally.
As for the story itself, it obviously works better as a setup than a standalone, and I assume there will be additional chapters written. I would grade this an "Incomplete" so far.
A few random tips:
-- Watch your tenses. You shifted from present to past, and past to present, several times throughout the story. Stick with the past tense and write as if you are telling your best friend about something that happened to you a year ago.
-- Use letters instead of numbers. For example: "you two" instead of "you 2."
-- Read your story at least twice, from beginning to end, before you submit it. There were several minor spelling and punctuation errors that could have been easily corrected with a once-over review.
Keep writing. It's the only way to improve!
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Anonymous07/22/14
AH YES,
Another idiot who thinks it's cool to write a bunch of words and call it a story!
The grammar could be tighter. And for those who were shocked by the implied infidelity, what did you expect on a site about – ‘Married extra-marital fun: swinging, sharing & more’?
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Anonymous07/23/14
Hey cucky Swingerjoe
Don't you mean Cuckerotica. Loving Wives has been replaced by this new category. That should make you and x_witless_x happy.
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Anonymous07/23/14
in the 1st paragraph wife says she wants to "spark" back in her marriage
So how does getting fucked by Robert and getting into S & M do that?
. . . and I hope it will continue. I like the way author exposed and developed Nancy's emotions and education in small and logical steps. I felt like I was walking through the club beside her as I was reading. To me that is the sign of a well told tale by a talented and knowing author.
Good job, I hope this series continues.
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Anonymous01/17/16
her marriage will get more "spark" than she ever imagined possible
once her husband finds out what she is, and rains Hell down on her little world.
English
bye
bye
1
Americans are all cucks?
This is hot 4*
For now, just 1 *...
Cheating can't never be hot....Her husband didn't show interest for her anymore, so she should have cleared all issues with him, before think in cheating...
Welcome to the Loving Wives category
You should expect a lot of flaming vitriol for writing a story that revolves around a cheating wife. That comes with the territory. Don't take it personally.
As for the story itself, it obviously works better as a setup than a standalone, and I assume there will be additional chapters written. I would grade this an "Incomplete" so far.
A few random tips:
-- Watch your tenses. You shifted from present to past, and past to present, several times throughout the story. Stick with the past tense and write as if you are telling your best friend about something that happened to you a year ago.
-- Use letters instead of numbers. For example: "you two" instead of "you 2."
-- Read your story at least twice, from beginning to end, before you submit it. There were several minor spelling and punctuation errors that could have been easily corrected with a once-over review.
Keep writing. It's the only way to improve!
AH YES,
Another idiot who thinks it's cool to write a bunch of words and call it a story!
1*
An old baboon has found a keyboard
Well I liked it
The grammar could be tighter. And for those who were shocked by the implied infidelity, what did you expect on a site about – ‘Married extra-marital fun: swinging, sharing & more’?
Hey cucky Swingerjoe
Don't you mean Cuckerotica. Loving Wives has been replaced by this new category. That should make you and x_witless_x happy.
in the 1st paragraph wife says she wants to "spark" back in her marriage
So how does getting fucked by Robert and getting into S & M do that?
This one was/is exciting . . .
. . . and I hope it will continue. I like the way author exposed and developed Nancy's emotions and education in small and logical steps. I felt like I was walking through the club beside her as I was reading. To me that is the sign of a well told tale by a talented and knowing author.
Good job, I hope this series continues.
her marriage will get more "spark" than she ever imagined possible
once her husband finds out what she is, and rains Hell down on her little world.
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