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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous07/24/14

Present Tense

Present tense narrative makes this story sound like a lousy bar joke.

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by Anonymous07/24/14

Needs editing.

This had so many problems with verb tense and grammar that I stopped reading it. I am not the grammar police but when it is so bad it distracts from the flow of the story it is a problem.

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by StevenMonel40007/24/14

Thanks for the comments

Honestly, I struggled with the verb tense when writing and editing it...

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by arrowglass07/30/14

NICE story!

Not withstanding the grammar critique...still a nice sweet story!

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