Even though you have mistakes in your story, you made it sound real. Sounds like you are from Serbia or a Russian province but that's not important. Read a lot of English books and your grammar will improve.
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Anonymous07/26/14
Seems to be some confusion here about ages.
" I was now 21, four years of extreme fantasizing about my step brother to no prevail!
There was something wrong with me I thought, I'm 19 and still a virgin"
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Anonymous07/27/14
Re: Step?
Yes it is illegal and defined as incest in a number of jurisdictions and a number of religions consider it to be incest as well, As for taboo, it is generally considered taboo to have sexual relations with family members and that does include step-siblings. That may be slipping a bit in our society as the number of merged families increase, but has not gone that far yet under most circumstances.
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Anonymous07/27/14
Ever hear of proofreading?
Whenever there are serious continuity errors like not keeping the age straight, 18 then 21 back to 19, the flow of the reading is disrupted. To be honest this was poorly written and really needs an editor.
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Anonymous08/14/14
did anybody notice?
90% of the paragraphs start with 'I'.
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Anonymous08/21/14
Poor writing
I am sorry but this story was not worth reading. Way too many errors. Should have been an easy catch of the age error.
English
Good story.
Even though you have mistakes in your story, you made it sound real. Sounds like you are from Serbia or a Russian province but that's not important. Read a lot of English books and your grammar will improve.
Seems to be some confusion here about ages.
" I was now 21, four years of extreme fantasizing about my step brother to no prevail!
There was something wrong with me I thought, I'm 19 and still a virgin"
Re: Step?
Yes it is illegal and defined as incest in a number of jurisdictions and a number of religions consider it to be incest as well, As for taboo, it is generally considered taboo to have sexual relations with family members and that does include step-siblings. That may be slipping a bit in our society as the number of merged families increase, but has not gone that far yet under most circumstances.
Ever hear of proofreading?
Whenever there are serious continuity errors like not keeping the age straight, 18 then 21 back to 19, the flow of the reading is disrupted. To be honest this was poorly written and really needs an editor.
did anybody notice?
90% of the paragraphs start with 'I'.
Poor writing
I am sorry but this story was not worth reading. Way too many errors. Should have been an easy catch of the age error.
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