It's disheartening to read about a husband that doesn't have the intestinal fortitude to split from a cheating wife. Why is it always the same contrived exuses used to have the husband keep a dishonest wife? It's as if JPB simply copied a pasted the ending from Oone of OHIO or UKs stories. As a personal opinion I would venture the excuse doesn't exuse the action. JPB wrote her excuse as believable as Hitler saying "OOPS I'm sorry"
JPB is always great value. Economical with words and to the point. Aspiring writers please take note and strive to imitate.
The only quibble I have with this story is that a big hurt like this will fester away unless it is lanced. I would be more confident about their future together if he had confronted her at the lake and let her know the pain she had caused.
Authors can sometimes (often?) convince me that reconciliation is appropriate. Not this time. I might have been able to get past the first date/first fuck, but certainly not the fourth date/second fuck and the planned three-day weekend.. Frank needs, at a minimum, to tell her knows so they can have a discussion regarding the consequences of any future cheating.
I just "love" these stories in which the cheater has to meet one more time to tell the paramour that it over. That is about as realistic as staying faithful while going out weekly with the girls for drinks and dancing.
I think the dialogue is very well written. There aren't that many writers here that can do that well. Kudos. Loved how well the story was written and crafted. Hated the wimpy ending but that doesn't take away from how well the story was done.
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Anonymous08/01/14
Loved story. Hated ending
The ending ruined the story for me. It would have been much better without the last sentence. Best to leave the main character with an unresolved question, loving his wife but not sure if he could ever totally trust her again. Surely her betrayal would eat away at him, even if he did decide to keep quiet and give it time. They might eventually make it, but I'm not convinced that he is better off with her after what he found out.
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Anonymous08/01/14
The ending sucked but the story was great!
"If I had run into her all these may years later and she had let me know she was available would I have said: "Sorry, but I'm married" or would I have said, "Yes! Finally!"
ANYONE married says, absolutely NO. Marriage is commitment and trust. Take either away and there is no marriage. I've had opportunities like this and did I ever take them? Absolutely not. My marriage, my wife, are worth so much more than sinking my cock into a different cunt that is only that, a different cunt.
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Anonymous08/01/14
Why pick on HIV when you're the one who's screwed up?
She LIED to you!
REPEATEDLY!
So you can't TRUST her.
Not to mention that Brandon wasn't a "one off" thing.
She may or may not ever have another fling, but why would you want to be married to someone who lies to your face with little or no REMORSE. (You said it yourself how great an actress she was while she was doing it.)
It isn't HIV that has the problem.
Sorry.
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Anonymous08/01/14
I agree with my friend when it comes to cheaters
My best buddy is a Minister and has been for 30 years. He ministers to cheaters or those who have been cheated on, countless times. He talks of forgiveness, of love and of compassion. So I asked him, could he forgive his wife if she cheated on him just once?
His answer? Absolutely not. Though they've been married 40 years, he told me if he even saw her kissing another man the same way she kissed him, he would throw her out and never take her back.
I agree with him.
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Anonymous08/01/14
a shame...
All that talent and just doesn't know how to end a story...this one needs FTDS something bad.
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Anonymous08/01/14
good one
good one bob. appreciate the work all these guys are from Virginia? lol
Apparently this is all you think you're worth.
Or all you deserve. Same thing.
Forget about the cheating.
How about the lying straight to your face?
Apparently for you, no problemo.
Truly, a genuine "loving wife."
By the way how to avoid sleeping with someone you shouldn't is simply to imagine what the face of the one who you love and who loves you and trusts you will look like when he or she finds out.
PS you're wrong about "pussy is pussy."
There is pussy and there is skank.
You have lying skank.
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Anonymous08/01/14
if this was for harry why was it on the other site first?
not a bad story but a marriage based on deceit, lies, and adultery for a long period of time cant last, eventually the sore will fester and then have to be lanced.
Well, this will DEFINITELY piss Harry off! If Wifey doesn't end up destitute, crippled, or dead, Harry usually won't like it.
That said, the tale itself was great up until the end, as other commenters have said. He talked a big talk about not giving anyone a free ride. He even walked the walk until it came to Wifey. She got a free ride. It would have been hilarious to get her reaction to Asshole getting his balls bashed in, at the very least. LOL
But hey, whatever. It's your universe. You're still the King of Twisted.
5 HUGE Stars for possibly giving Harry a conniption.
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Anonymous08/01/14
Everything was there for a fantastic story however,
It just did not click. She was never confronted. Leaving this unresolved would have made me go crazy. Normally a # 5 for you Bob today only # 3. Sorry.
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Anonymous08/01/14
So after all that about no one riding for free... she got one.
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Anonymous08/01/14
Good story
I like JPB because his stories are not predictable. I like not knowing how it will turn out till the end. Harry in Va and a few others remind me of my daughter. If the stories did not end with the words "They lived happy ever after"... she through a tantrum. As an adult she reads novels by the same authors that always have happy endings. Well there are authors that always end in their story with "The bitch burned in hell for eternity and the man found long life, happiness and revenge is sweet" or similar crap.... I am not sure why some readers continue to read stories by authors like Mat M, then bitch about stories that don't end up with the ending they prefer... hell they are just stories after all. This is not "The Twilight zone" where a woman reads a story and is doomed to play one of the roles for eternity.
Yet another husband talking up how tough he is but doing nothing about the problem he has, his wife. She got a free ride. What is he going to do? Beat up all the guys she screws with now that she has gotten a taste and gotten away with it? Eventually the police will catch him and he will serve time. They might even be able to tie him back to the others he beat up. Is he also going to be afraid to leave her alone because when she is "lonely" she fucks other men?
Maybe he doesn't want to leave her. Fine. Pick 10 other women, screw them, and let his wife know what her arrogance cost her.
Joyce is a moron. Instead of having Wendy voice all the stupid excuses, Joyce does it. All the excuses lead to one conclusion, women are children who can't control their emotions and behavior and need to be protected from themselves. They are incapable of responsibility and trust. They are incapable of upholding a contract (marriage). They are nice pets but need to be kept on a leash. Pretty pathetic, eh? Well, I didn't write the story.
Good story...So why just 3 *? Just because he should have cleared everything with her, in order to both forget and go on with their married life...But all he did was to hear from her friend...
It does concern me that Wendy got a "free ride" but sometimes you have to bend your own rules to make life bearable. Nice revenge on the prick but using baseball bats on people isn't the best way to stay out of jail. If I were in his shoes I would worry that Joyce might give up his secret someday. I'd be thinking about what I was going to say to Wendy when that day came. All in all a good tale of revenge and forgiveness. Thanks Bob.
"Well when you do try to decide keep in mind that the girl really does love you."
But obviousely she loved her secret fantasy even more. Sorry Bob, at the least she needed to be served separation papers to show her just how much she screwed up. Hubby dear in your version will always have to look over her shoulder to see what "new" fantasy she is thinking about and there will be more for certain. She got away with it clean once.
As I see it this is just another wimpy tough guy story under RAAC rules. Try one where SHE has to fight as hard to save her marriage as she fought to have a 4 month lover.
But then again I guess you wouldn't be writing stories just to piss off good old Harry then now would you. Hmmm. Perhaps you and Harry should be the subject of a RAAC.
I liked this story except for the fact that he didn't confront her about it. Everyone makes mistakes in life. Cheating is not the worst mistake in history, and it doesn't make the cheater an evil person. The fact that she learned from her own mistake and ended it on her own accord showed that she valued her husband, She had to come to that conclusion after fucking up, but most people learn life's big lessons after BIG mistakes. How many people have become expert car shoppers after being sold a lemon?
I feel that this guy did himself and his wife a disservice by not confronting her. He will never be able to move past it because he'll not have any resolution. She doesn't know how much she hurt him, so for her its as if it never happened. Whenever he is feeling insecure, she will have no idea why. They are both set up for a frustrating life together unless they deal with her cheating. This marriage, as this story sits, will ultimately end in divorce.
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Anonymous08/01/14
Pissed off
This was a "fun story" and although you probably did piss off a few, I liked your approach. Keep up the good work. Remember, beauty is in the eye of the beholder.
I could not find any comment with his signature - he must be really pissed.
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Anonymous08/01/14
"If she knows she didn't get it from me."
Why believe Joyce? The way you wrote her character, it's plain that she would side with Wendy.
Maybe if you tried writing so we know some of her thoughts (e.g., 3rd person limited omniscient), there might be a reason to believe her, but as written there's none. Given the way she’s acted, her very words, I’d be inclined to think she tipped off Wendy, regardless of what she said.
Even without that, it doesn’t change that now she knows she can get away with it. Again, all we have to go on are his thoughts and what Joyce and Wendy tell him, two people who have a vested interest in lying to him. Without really knowing what they are thinking, they are only words with nothing real to back them up.
First, I believe Wendy might have suspected her husband either knew or was suspicious. I base this on personal experience. I am so transparent around my wife she knows everything all the time. Wendy thought something was wrong, and he gave her a bullshit story. I think she knew right then. Or she may have called Joyce and Joyce may have hinted at something.
Second, I could never have held it in, not for a day, not for ten minutes. When she said she loved him after having sex, that's when I would have had said something. Honestly, I don't think I could have waited that long. If it were me I'd have handed her the letter that afternoon when I got home. I can hear myself, "Hey what's this?" I imagine it would have been downhill from there. I would have most likely been out the door that evening.
Third, I know I would never have been interested in the guy at all. He did what he did. I never married him. It could have been anybody.
Last, this story is a five, and here's why. I didn't just turn it off and go back to work. I actually thought about what I'd read. I had fun! Isn't that the idea?
And an extra last; I certainly hope HIV does get pissed. Thanks Bob.
'I swear that I've never been this happy with anyone else in my lift.' The word should be life, not lift.
'Try to image how she was feeling Frank.' Image would be alright by definition, imagine would be the better word to use. Try to imagine how she was feeling Frank.
Yes, this is taken out of context but, you have created a one sentence paragraph that is a continuation of the previous sentence and the following sentence.
'It doesn't matter if you win or lose baby; what matters most is that you fight back.
"You do not give anyone a free ride.
"The bullies will see that and they will leave you alone. Most will anyway although there will always be one or two stupid ones who are too dumb to learn.'
The mother is giving advice to her child, and doesn't change topic. You start a new paragraph when the topic is changed. It should read like this:
'It doesn't matter if you win or lose baby; what matters most is that you fight back. You do not give anyone a free ride. The bullies will see that and they will leave you alone. Most will anyway although there will always be one or two stupid ones who are too dumb to learn.'
There are many cases of no or incorrect punctuation.
These are the reasons why a five star story gets one star. And No, I Didn't Vote.
"...it has been the best thirty days of my life. You make me so fucking happy. Whenever I see your face my heart lights up.... Every time I look into your eyes I lose myself completely. I'm always thinking about you 24/7. I swear that I've NEVER been this happy with ANYONE ELSE in my lift (sic)... You are the light of my life, the other half of my heart.... I can't wait until we have our three day weekend together. I want to spend the rest of my life with you...
I love you so much.
Love Your baby girl Wendy."
1) If my wife wrote that to someone else, there would be NO NEED for ANY discussion. Payback if you are so inclined, but discussion? For what? "Building him up to let him down"??
BS!!!! Believe it if you enjoy deluding yourself.
No. It's over: game, set, match.
PS 1) For wifey to do a 180 and go with hubby means BFF told her what's up and she is doing damage control to not lose her meal ticket.
2) For her to VOLUNTARILY write this means she would NEVER give up this guy.
3) Thus, hubby is simply a chump and a stupid, naive one at that.
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Anonymous08/01/14
i"m not make that way
she will see another crush one day and you will be wondering.where my bat.
There is another world where the wives are perfect except for one thing, they cheat on their husbands! That is the world that so many of these stories seem to be based in. That, or these husband's are all attached to their wives like little boy's to their mommies. Give me a break. The average marriage that lasts is far from perfect, but it is also far from cheating. In most cases, if you find out your spouse is cheating your number one concern is the damage to your lifestyle and your finances. There generally has been so much nasty shit that has gone on in the marriage before people cheat that cheating and the inevitable divorce are a blessing! Also, in another world maybe you can get away with beating someone with a baseball bat, in this one, the cuckold is the number one suspect. He would be facing multiple felonies and significant prison time, along with the end of everything he has worked for. So that is out, unless you are a dope. What you can do is sit down with your wife, take out the letter and read it to her. You can tell her how it made you feel. You can tell her that given her letter, you no longer want to continue the marriage with her. You can offer her a no hassle low cost divorce. If she takes it, you move on and busy yourself with your new life. If she doesn't you simply leave and start your new life anyway. A character such as the protagonist in this tale would never settle for this kind of abuse given his childhood. No one is so important in your life that betrayal is ever acceptable.
A few things.....
1) THANKYOU so much for opening up to anon comments. Usually you don't, but I really appreciate that you did.
2) You have written so many variations, that as someone else said, when you open up a JPB, you never know what you will get. I honestly feel that this is part of the secret to your success. I say, fuck 'em all, and keep 'em guessing!
3) This story was primarily boiler plate. That is OK. The idea was to point all clues towards BTB, and then....? Well we could examine the reasons (or pros and cons) for either stance. Divorce or reconcile? This will continue to be an endless debate, but it will ALWAYS depend on the specific circumstances of the folks involved. Any detractors to this story featuring a reconciliation need to remember that JPB helped to invent (or at least help to redefine) the entire BTB genre! If Bob felt the bitch needed the curbside pick-up, then she would be out with the other trash. I DO think that Bob helped the reader to see that she DID love him over and above her high school crush, she DID realize she made a mistake, and she did end it of her own volition BEFORE any ultimatums needed to be levied. I see the case for forgiveness, and since it is Bob, the reader can rest assured that his character will never forget.
4) As others have noted, JPB's strength is in realistic, natural, and easy flowing dialogue. It definitely helps us to see these people as REAL. That said, THIS story seems to lack some important dialogue passages. Hmm.....
5) I think the case for reconciliation was strong, EXCEPT it could have been made even stronger IF:
a) we got to witness a confrontation between hubby and wife
b) we got to witness her reaction to lover-boy being taught a lesson
c) she had a thorough heart to heart with her BFF where she explains her logic, fears, and lessons learned.
d) we got to witness her actions that PROVED she was making the effort/ would continue to make the effort to assure him he had nothing to worry about in the future.
6) I have always thought that your male leads WAIT too long before confronting the wife on her behaviors. In this story, he decided to NEVER confront her. WHY? I mean, that letter was pretty damaging stuff. The fact that the letter even EXISTED was "almost" worse than the fact that they fucked several times. She would have needed to explain the letter before I could even spend one more night with her!
7) Now, I actually can see that from a philosophical standpoint, you may have tried to craft a scenario where he really had to ask himself some tough questions about how to proceed in the relationship IF what he wanted MOST was for it to continue, without CHANGING it beyond all recognition. Whether he was right or not, how would proving her SOO wrong change who she was on a fundamental level??
OK, fair enough.
HOWEVER
That is NOT where you took us with this tale. Never once did he have even the self argument where he agonizes over what "might" be better left unsaid. Never did he ask himself the "tough what if" questions. He simply reacted to her cancelling plans, accepted her lovemaking, zipped his lip, and prayed for the best.
8) I think you can see why "Harry" might have raised some call to BULLSHIT!
9) It wasn't that you didn't give us an ending to the story, but the story itself need just a little more meat on its bones. You HAVE done it before, and by God, your many faithful fans are waiting for you to do it again.
10) It IS worth a 5 and endless joy just to see you still contributing here, but dammit man, can you really blame us, if we are still starving for more?
11)THANKYOU so much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
12) can't wait for the next one.........
Drive to the cabin, unpack her stuff, hand her the letter, then hand her the divorce papers, drive away, and if she calls her friend to come and get her....have a few beers with her friends husband..... Or ??? JUST some other ending to this story then the one you wrote......PLEASE !!!
This would be a stronger story with some form of resolution about her affair. I agree that as a minimum she sholud be confronted with the letter and given an opportunity to beg for forgiveness and a renewed trust. Where it stands now I have to believe his trust has been shaken.
Does it matter that she started cheating while he was dealing with his dead fathers estate?! That just hit me, had to comment on that. Sure she loves him - with a wife like that who needs enemies?
English
Such a sad man
It's disheartening to read about a husband that doesn't have the intestinal fortitude to split from a cheating wife. Why is it always the same contrived exuses used to have the husband keep a dishonest wife? It's as if JPB simply copied a pasted the ending from Oone of OHIO or UKs stories. As a personal opinion I would venture the excuse doesn't exuse the action. JPB wrote her excuse as believable as Hitler saying "OOPS I'm sorry"
Another Good One
JPB is always great value. Economical with words and to the point. Aspiring writers please take note and strive to imitate.
The only quibble I have with this story is that a big hurt like this will fester away unless it is lanced. I would be more confident about their future together if he had confronted her at the lake and let her know the pain she had caused.
Very good story and very well-written.
Authors can sometimes (often?) convince me that reconciliation is appropriate. Not this time. I might have been able to get past the first date/first fuck, but certainly not the fourth date/second fuck and the planned three-day weekend.. Frank needs, at a minimum, to tell her knows so they can have a discussion regarding the consequences of any future cheating.
I just "love" these stories in which the cheater has to meet one more time to tell the paramour that it over. That is about as realistic as staying faithful while going out weekly with the girls for drinks and dancing.
I wonder ....
What would happen if she did it again .... abberation I mean ;-)
Dialogue
I think the dialogue is very well written. There aren't that many writers here that can do that well. Kudos. Loved how well the story was written and crafted. Hated the wimpy ending but that doesn't take away from how well the story was done.
Loved story. Hated ending
The ending ruined the story for me. It would have been much better without the last sentence. Best to leave the main character with an unresolved question, loving his wife but not sure if he could ever totally trust her again. Surely her betrayal would eat away at him, even if he did decide to keep quiet and give it time. They might eventually make it, but I'm not convinced that he is better off with her after what he found out.
The ending sucked but the story was great!
"If I had run into her all these may years later and she had let me know she was available would I have said: "Sorry, but I'm married" or would I have said, "Yes! Finally!"
ANYONE married says, absolutely NO. Marriage is commitment and trust. Take either away and there is no marriage. I've had opportunities like this and did I ever take them? Absolutely not. My marriage, my wife, are worth so much more than sinking my cock into a different cunt that is only that, a different cunt.
Why pick on HIV when you're the one who's screwed up?
She LIED to you!
REPEATEDLY!
So you can't TRUST her.
Not to mention that Brandon wasn't a "one off" thing.
She may or may not ever have another fling, but why would you want to be married to someone who lies to your face with little or no REMORSE. (You said it yourself how great an actress she was while she was doing it.)
It isn't HIV that has the problem.
Sorry.
I agree with my friend when it comes to cheaters
My best buddy is a Minister and has been for 30 years. He ministers to cheaters or those who have been cheated on, countless times. He talks of forgiveness, of love and of compassion. So I asked him, could he forgive his wife if she cheated on him just once?
His answer? Absolutely not. Though they've been married 40 years, he told me if he even saw her kissing another man the same way she kissed him, he would throw her out and never take her back.
I agree with him.
a shame...
All that talent and just doesn't know how to end a story...this one needs FTDS something bad.
good one
good one bob. appreciate the work all these guys are from Virginia? lol
Sad.
Apparently this is all you think you're worth.
Or all you deserve. Same thing.
Forget about the cheating.
How about the lying straight to your face?
Apparently for you, no problemo.
Truly, a genuine "loving wife."
By the way how to avoid sleeping with someone you shouldn't is simply to imagine what the face of the one who you love and who loves you and trusts you will look like when he or she finds out.
PS you're wrong about "pussy is pussy."
There is pussy and there is skank.
You have lying skank.
if this was for harry why was it on the other site first?
not a bad story but a marriage based on deceit, lies, and adultery for a long period of time cant last, eventually the sore will fester and then have to be lanced.
Damn! LOL
Well, this will DEFINITELY piss Harry off! If Wifey doesn't end up destitute, crippled, or dead, Harry usually won't like it.
That said, the tale itself was great up until the end, as other commenters have said. He talked a big talk about not giving anyone a free ride. He even walked the walk until it came to Wifey. She got a free ride. It would have been hilarious to get her reaction to Asshole getting his balls bashed in, at the very least. LOL
But hey, whatever. It's your universe. You're still the King of Twisted.
5 HUGE Stars for possibly giving Harry a conniption.
Everything was there for a fantastic story however,
It just did not click. She was never confronted. Leaving this unresolved would have made me go crazy. Normally a # 5 for you Bob today only # 3. Sorry.
So after all that about no one riding for free... she got one.
Good story
I like JPB because his stories are not predictable. I like not knowing how it will turn out till the end. Harry in Va and a few others remind me of my daughter. If the stories did not end with the words "They lived happy ever after"... she through a tantrum. As an adult she reads novels by the same authors that always have happy endings. Well there are authors that always end in their story with "The bitch burned in hell for eternity and the man found long life, happiness and revenge is sweet" or similar crap.... I am not sure why some readers continue to read stories by authors like Mat M, then bitch about stories that don't end up with the ending they prefer... hell they are just stories after all. This is not "The Twilight zone" where a woman reads a story and is doomed to play one of the roles for eternity.
Yet another husband talking up how tough he is but doing nothing about the problem he has, his wife. She got a free ride. What is he going to do? Beat up all the guys she screws with now that she has gotten a taste and gotten away with it? Eventually the police will catch him and he will serve time. They might even be able to tie him back to the others he beat up. Is he also going to be afraid to leave her alone because when she is "lonely" she fucks other men?
Maybe he doesn't want to leave her. Fine. Pick 10 other women, screw them, and let his wife know what her arrogance cost her.
Joyce is a moron. Instead of having Wendy voice all the stupid excuses, Joyce does it. All the excuses lead to one conclusion, women are children who can't control their emotions and behavior and need to be protected from themselves. They are incapable of responsibility and trust. They are incapable of upholding a contract (marriage). They are nice pets but need to be kept on a leash. Pretty pathetic, eh? Well, I didn't write the story.
will she find out
I wonder what her reaction will be if and when she finds out that he got the shit kicked out of him, that will tell husband more
Good story...
Good story...So why just 3 *? Just because he should have cleared everything with her, in order to both forget and go on with their married life...But all he did was to hear from her friend...
Like I really believe:
Like I really believe that Joyce did not say anything to Wendy and all of a sudden now she can't stand the thought of being away for 3 days.
Another well written JPB story.
It does concern me that Wendy got a "free ride" but sometimes you have to bend your own rules to make life bearable. Nice revenge on the prick but using baseball bats on people isn't the best way to stay out of jail. If I were in his shoes I would worry that Joyce might give up his secret someday. I'd be thinking about what I was going to say to Wendy when that day came. All in all a good tale of revenge and forgiveness. Thanks Bob.
Not Harry
"Well when you do try to decide keep in mind that the girl really does love you."
But obviousely she loved her secret fantasy even more. Sorry Bob, at the least she needed to be served separation papers to show her just how much she screwed up. Hubby dear in your version will always have to look over her shoulder to see what "new" fantasy she is thinking about and there will be more for certain. She got away with it clean once.
As I see it this is just another wimpy tough guy story under RAAC rules. Try one where SHE has to fight as hard to save her marriage as she fought to have a 4 month lover.
But then again I guess you wouldn't be writing stories just to piss off good old Harry then now would you. Hmmm. Perhaps you and Harry should be the subject of a RAAC.
BTB
Finish the damn story...& BTB.
Crap!
Not only Harry is pissed off by this shit story!
Yeah, JPB, you can be pissed of at me too.
You call this a story? I call it typical JPB cheating wife story (of which you are the master).
Nice story, but marriage is in trouble
I liked this story except for the fact that he didn't confront her about it. Everyone makes mistakes in life. Cheating is not the worst mistake in history, and it doesn't make the cheater an evil person. The fact that she learned from her own mistake and ended it on her own accord showed that she valued her husband, She had to come to that conclusion after fucking up, but most people learn life's big lessons after BIG mistakes. How many people have become expert car shoppers after being sold a lemon?
I feel that this guy did himself and his wife a disservice by not confronting her. He will never be able to move past it because he'll not have any resolution. She doesn't know how much she hurt him, so for her its as if it never happened. Whenever he is feeling insecure, she will have no idea why. They are both set up for a frustrating life together unless they deal with her cheating. This marriage, as this story sits, will ultimately end in divorce.
Pissed off
This was a "fun story" and although you probably did piss off a few, I liked your approach. Keep up the good work. Remember, beauty is in the eye of the beholder.
Good Read***
Thanks for sharing.
Not bad
Not up to the standard of your best, but then they can't all be.
Nice little read.
Congretulations: Harry is pissed
I could not find any comment with his signature - he must be really pissed.
"If she knows she didn't get it from me."
Why believe Joyce? The way you wrote her character, it's plain that she would side with Wendy.
Maybe if you tried writing so we know some of her thoughts (e.g., 3rd person limited omniscient), there might be a reason to believe her, but as written there's none. Given the way she’s acted, her very words, I’d be inclined to think she tipped off Wendy, regardless of what she said.
Even without that, it doesn’t change that now she knows she can get away with it. Again, all we have to go on are his thoughts and what Joyce and Wendy tell him, two people who have a vested interest in lying to him. Without really knowing what they are thinking, they are only words with nothing real to back them up.
Fun read
Thanks for posting!
He violated his own rule
she got a free ride.
It will make HIV very happy
Knowing that he has gotten inside your head.
Let me say this...
I have three thoughts, well four.
First, I believe Wendy might have suspected her husband either knew or was suspicious. I base this on personal experience. I am so transparent around my wife she knows everything all the time. Wendy thought something was wrong, and he gave her a bullshit story. I think she knew right then. Or she may have called Joyce and Joyce may have hinted at something.
Second, I could never have held it in, not for a day, not for ten minutes. When she said she loved him after having sex, that's when I would have had said something. Honestly, I don't think I could have waited that long. If it were me I'd have handed her the letter that afternoon when I got home. I can hear myself, "Hey what's this?" I imagine it would have been downhill from there. I would have most likely been out the door that evening.
Third, I know I would never have been interested in the guy at all. He did what he did. I never married him. It could have been anybody.
Last, this story is a five, and here's why. I didn't just turn it off and go back to work. I actually thought about what I'd read. I had fun! Isn't that the idea?
And an extra last; I certainly hope HIV does get pissed. Thanks Bob.
Just the first page
'I swear that I've never been this happy with anyone else in my lift.' The word should be life, not lift.
'Try to image how she was feeling Frank.' Image would be alright by definition, imagine would be the better word to use. Try to imagine how she was feeling Frank.
Yes, this is taken out of context but, you have created a one sentence paragraph that is a continuation of the previous sentence and the following sentence.
'It doesn't matter if you win or lose baby; what matters most is that you fight back.
"You do not give anyone a free ride.
"The bullies will see that and they will leave you alone. Most will anyway although there will always be one or two stupid ones who are too dumb to learn.'
The mother is giving advice to her child, and doesn't change topic. You start a new paragraph when the topic is changed. It should read like this:
'It doesn't matter if you win or lose baby; what matters most is that you fight back. You do not give anyone a free ride. The bullies will see that and they will leave you alone. Most will anyway although there will always be one or two stupid ones who are too dumb to learn.'
There are many cases of no or incorrect punctuation.
These are the reasons why a five star story gets one star. And No, I Didn't Vote.
1 star
1 of your worst jpb.
Does NO ONE remember "the letter"???
"...it has been the best thirty days of my life. You make me so fucking happy. Whenever I see your face my heart lights up.... Every time I look into your eyes I lose myself completely. I'm always thinking about you 24/7. I swear that I've NEVER been this happy with ANYONE ELSE in my lift (sic)... You are the light of my life, the other half of my heart.... I can't wait until we have our three day weekend together. I want to spend the rest of my life with you...
I love you so much.
Love Your baby girl Wendy."
1) If my wife wrote that to someone else, there would be NO NEED for ANY discussion. Payback if you are so inclined, but discussion? For what? "Building him up to let him down"??
BS!!!! Believe it if you enjoy deluding yourself.
No. It's over: game, set, match.
PS 1) For wifey to do a 180 and go with hubby means BFF told her what's up and she is doing damage control to not lose her meal ticket.
2) For her to VOLUNTARILY write this means she would NEVER give up this guy.
3) Thus, hubby is simply a chump and a stupid, naive one at that.
i"m not make that way
she will see another crush one day and you will be wondering.where my bat.
To. The. Curb.
The letter:
I want to spend the rest of my life with you and never let you go.
That was not addressed to Frank, but that is really all he needs to know about where he is in the marriage.
To. The. Curb.
End of story.
Not your best...
Seems to me your heart wasn't in this one. 3*
Another World
There is another world where the wives are perfect except for one thing, they cheat on their husbands! That is the world that so many of these stories seem to be based in. That, or these husband's are all attached to their wives like little boy's to their mommies. Give me a break. The average marriage that lasts is far from perfect, but it is also far from cheating. In most cases, if you find out your spouse is cheating your number one concern is the damage to your lifestyle and your finances. There generally has been so much nasty shit that has gone on in the marriage before people cheat that cheating and the inevitable divorce are a blessing! Also, in another world maybe you can get away with beating someone with a baseball bat, in this one, the cuckold is the number one suspect. He would be facing multiple felonies and significant prison time, along with the end of everything he has worked for. So that is out, unless you are a dope. What you can do is sit down with your wife, take out the letter and read it to her. You can tell her how it made you feel. You can tell her that given her letter, you no longer want to continue the marriage with her. You can offer her a no hassle low cost divorce. If she takes it, you move on and busy yourself with your new life. If she doesn't you simply leave and start your new life anyway. A character such as the protagonist in this tale would never settle for this kind of abuse given his childhood. No one is so important in your life that betrayal is ever acceptable.
Enjoyed the read and that's all that is important. It is a story ... a well written story. No moral judgments. A story. And one that is well written.
Ok...
Where is FTDS when we need him ???
ALWAYS LOVE me some JPB!!!!!
A few things.....
1) THANKYOU so much for opening up to anon comments. Usually you don't, but I really appreciate that you did.
2) You have written so many variations, that as someone else said, when you open up a JPB, you never know what you will get. I honestly feel that this is part of the secret to your success. I say, fuck 'em all, and keep 'em guessing!
3) This story was primarily boiler plate. That is OK. The idea was to point all clues towards BTB, and then....? Well we could examine the reasons (or pros and cons) for either stance. Divorce or reconcile? This will continue to be an endless debate, but it will ALWAYS depend on the specific circumstances of the folks involved. Any detractors to this story featuring a reconciliation need to remember that JPB helped to invent (or at least help to redefine) the entire BTB genre! If Bob felt the bitch needed the curbside pick-up, then she would be out with the other trash. I DO think that Bob helped the reader to see that she DID love him over and above her high school crush, she DID realize she made a mistake, and she did end it of her own volition BEFORE any ultimatums needed to be levied. I see the case for forgiveness, and since it is Bob, the reader can rest assured that his character will never forget.
4) As others have noted, JPB's strength is in realistic, natural, and easy flowing dialogue. It definitely helps us to see these people as REAL. That said, THIS story seems to lack some important dialogue passages. Hmm.....
5) I think the case for reconciliation was strong, EXCEPT it could have been made even stronger IF:
a) we got to witness a confrontation between hubby and wife
b) we got to witness her reaction to lover-boy being taught a lesson
c) she had a thorough heart to heart with her BFF where she explains her logic, fears, and lessons learned.
d) we got to witness her actions that PROVED she was making the effort/ would continue to make the effort to assure him he had nothing to worry about in the future.
6) I have always thought that your male leads WAIT too long before confronting the wife on her behaviors. In this story, he decided to NEVER confront her. WHY? I mean, that letter was pretty damaging stuff. The fact that the letter even EXISTED was "almost" worse than the fact that they fucked several times. She would have needed to explain the letter before I could even spend one more night with her!
7) Now, I actually can see that from a philosophical standpoint, you may have tried to craft a scenario where he really had to ask himself some tough questions about how to proceed in the relationship IF what he wanted MOST was for it to continue, without CHANGING it beyond all recognition. Whether he was right or not, how would proving her SOO wrong change who she was on a fundamental level??
OK, fair enough.
HOWEVER
That is NOT where you took us with this tale. Never once did he have even the self argument where he agonizes over what "might" be better left unsaid. Never did he ask himself the "tough what if" questions. He simply reacted to her cancelling plans, accepted her lovemaking, zipped his lip, and prayed for the best.
8) I think you can see why "Harry" might have raised some call to BULLSHIT!
9) It wasn't that you didn't give us an ending to the story, but the story itself need just a little more meat on its bones. You HAVE done it before, and by God, your many faithful fans are waiting for you to do it again.
10) It IS worth a 5 and endless joy just to see you still contributing here, but dammit man, can you really blame us, if we are still starving for more?
11)THANKYOU so much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
12) can't wait for the next one.........
Or this
Drive to the cabin, unpack her stuff, hand her the letter, then hand her the divorce papers, drive away, and if she calls her friend to come and get her....have a few beers with her friends husband..... Or ??? JUST some other ending to this story then the one you wrote......PLEASE !!!
Soooo, she gets the free pass?
This would be a stronger story with some form of resolution about her affair. I agree that as a minimum she sholud be confronted with the letter and given an opportunity to beg for forgiveness and a renewed trust. Where it stands now I have to believe his trust has been shaken.
BTW
Does it matter that she started cheating while he was dealing with his dead fathers estate?! That just hit me, had to comment on that. Sure she loves him - with a wife like that who needs enemies?
Hope Harry loved it as much as I did.
Maybe people should write more stories for Harry?
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