Spelling and grammatical errors aside this was a great first effort. I hope you continue to write.
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Anonymous07/31/14
Loved and hated it
Great writing, hot story, nice development. I have a hard time getting past the cheating, being a wife myself...
But the spelling is the larger crime here. Spell check is just not doing it, find a live person who is truly literate to proofread for you.
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Anonymous08/02/14
Learn to Use your Tools
If you want to be a writer, you need to become familiar with the language. The persons with whom one works are "colleagues" not "colleges." Women "groan," they do not "grown" in passion. If you do not understand the difference or are simply too lazy to learn to use a dictionary, I think you will find that most readers quit reading your work after a few paragraphs. I know that I did.
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Anonymous08/28/14
What a turn-off
I couldn't get past the first paragraph because of the poor spelling. I thought there was at least a little bit editing, but I guess I was wrong.
English
A good read
Spelling and grammatical errors aside this was a great first effort. I hope you continue to write.
Loved and hated it
Great writing, hot story, nice development. I have a hard time getting past the cheating, being a wife myself...
But the spelling is the larger crime here. Spell check is just not doing it, find a live person who is truly literate to proofread for you.
Learn to Use your Tools
If you want to be a writer, you need to become familiar with the language. The persons with whom one works are "colleagues" not "colleges." Women "groan," they do not "grown" in passion. If you do not understand the difference or are simply too lazy to learn to use a dictionary, I think you will find that most readers quit reading your work after a few paragraphs. I know that I did.
What a turn-off
I couldn't get past the first paragraph because of the poor spelling. I thought there was at least a little bit editing, but I guess I was wrong.
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