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Breaking the Girl

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by Anonymous

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by shyintx08/10/14

It was like you found an erotic novel and just snatched a sex scene out of it. This could have been a really good story if you had started from the beginning of their relationship and had added some care from him in it.

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by Anonymous08/11/14

Waste of time.

If you're going to write a story, make it yours. There has to be a reason he needs to break her, what is that reason? And once he's broken her, then what? And if they've been fucking for over 5 months, he won't be "too massive", her body would naturally acclimate.

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by Anonymous08/12/14

Amazing

Great story! Got me so wet!

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by Gemigirl199308/20/14

Good first story

For a first, this is good. It would have been better if it started when he first obtained her, and she was fully resistant. Build up is better than random sex scene. Overall though, that was good.

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by Anonymous08/22/14

Picture it like this....

Imagine... If you will... A woman leaning in, and whispering into your ear... "I want to fuck you." Sounds kind of hot, right?

Now picture that same woman leaning in, and whispering... "Want."

It's just not the same without the beginning, or an ending.... just like this story.

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