Different storyline. It's definitely unique to have the wolves in a bad way right from the start and for our hero to be considered one of the weaker alphas (or at least from a weak pack) rather than the strongest. I'm interested to see where you take this.
You might want to describe the accent/ drawl you're going for rather than "alotta, grow'n, hunt'n" etc. That really distracts from the story. I would prefer a great description or even a mediocre description and my imagination rather than having it shoved in my face like that.
I see another chapter has already posted, so I'll have a look at that one too. Thanks for writing.
Your story line you've set up is much, much better than I have read in a long time. Completely enjoyed your first chapter and hope many more are to follow. Nice to see this pack isn't as rich and pretentious as others seem to be.
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I am very interested! Please keep writing and let us know where this story goes : )
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Good start.
Different storyline. It's definitely unique to have the wolves in a bad way right from the start and for our hero to be considered one of the weaker alphas (or at least from a weak pack) rather than the strongest. I'm interested to see where you take this.
You might want to describe the accent/ drawl you're going for rather than "alotta, grow'n, hunt'n" etc. That really distracts from the story. I would prefer a great description or even a mediocre description and my imagination rather than having it shoved in my face like that.
I see another chapter has already posted, so I'll have a look at that one too. Thanks for writing.
Please keep writing
Your story line you've set up is much, much better than I have read in a long time. Completely enjoyed your first chapter and hope many more are to follow. Nice to see this pack isn't as rich and pretentious as others seem to be.
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