I love the teasing and the way he dominates her, but you seriously dropped the ball at the end. All that teasing & build up ended with "Later, they both came." Seriously? It was a let down in an otherwise GREAT story!
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I love the teasing and the way he dominates her, but you seriously dropped the ball at the end. All that teasing & build up ended with "Later, they both came." Seriously? It was a let down in an otherwise GREAT story!
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