Okay I'll do it

f/u for ok ill do it!

Need a follow up story. That one was so fucking hot. How about a fuck on the wedding day with brother or father or father-in-law as a red head, sister-in-law maybe, mother or mother-in-law. do a follow up plz

More please

Hornet, there's nothing like a good incest story to get your cock hardening, or juices flowing (dependant of your sex, of course)and that was a great story. I have read a couple of yours now and look forward to reading the rest. I notice you haven't submitted anything lately. You should, you have the nack of getting to the plot , increasing the sexual tension as you go. Use the "spell check" though.

Awesome

that's as hot as it gets. I wish i could pull something like that off.

Wrong section

Wrong section. I hate when I read a story that I think is about a slutty wife or a girl sucking a dick and half way through blam, there's a gay guy and a zebra with a bucket of golf balls. I lost interest when the brother was cheering. I have a sister and the thought makes me want to vomit, put this story in another category.

my goddddd, i came so hard!

i would love to be able to pull off anything close to this. this is a woman's ultimate dream. imagine?

Ho hum

LOL. An almost inexperienced girl see a cock and goes wild. No one with an IQ above 100 believes that crap.

Reality

Intrestingly you touched on reality: 1. Women do think like this, but society restrains them from normality. 2. I have experienced similar situations, and feel I am a "good girl" because of them!

Sometimes reality sucks

Highly erotic
Great continuity
I agree you should write more and IF
I don’t like a story I either stop
and don’t rate it or I rate it as I see it

HUGS and a kiss to the author.

Total crap

How the hell would she be able to hide her naked self from her own fiancee? Totally implausible. A bralinless idea.

Great

now he's going to marry a fucking whore and its her own brother who turned her out. To bad she wasn't discovered so her future husband could have the chance to sell her cheating ass on street corners instead of working.

related pimp

She want to keep things in control and she there she went and out of control. The brother will pimp her out and the groom/husband to be is intended to be not the wiser. May he find out quickly before there are too many entanglements with her, of any sort.

Wrong Category

Decent story. I was liking this 100% until the brother had to join in too. I was hoping the intro with him didn't go where I thought it would - but unfortunately you did.

This isn't a "loving wives" story, she was still his finance. This goes in the 'incest' area where it would probably get more views and better reviews.

I almost feel sorry for Sam

On the other hand, he had no hesitation in fucking a stripper on the eve of his wedding, so he probably deserves everything he'll get in the morning.

Hypocrites

For everyone calling her a whore and crying in defense of the groom, maybe they should re-read the part where Sam gladly fucked who he believed was a stripper. I've always believed that "Loving Wives" stories have always involved the husband being a willing and knowledgable participant who actively supports, if not encourages, his wife's sexual exploits. As for this story, BOTH are cheaters; that title does not just belong to her. Adding the bit with her brother was completely out of left field and unless this story has a Part 2, it doesn't make any sense and is just some filler material.

This story has a bit of an identity issue. It doesn't fit in with "Loving Wives" and focuses on the brother/sister relationship for about a second so it can't be labeled as "Incest/Taboo." Maybe "Erotic Couplings" or "Group Sex" would be better?

Anonymous is 100% correct.

Seeing a cock is not going make a woman go crazy nor would a woman talk like she did. That is just athe writer's fantasy.

If she had only fucked Sam and then left, I would have given it 5*****s. However, even though the story was sexy, it was too unrealistic so I rated it 3***s. Had everyone fucked her more than once and other stuff, I would have rated it 1*.

Awesome....

I love the rawness of the story; the fact that she did fuck all those guys. I wish I had a wife/girlfriend/sister like that. Great story.

Nice hot and sticky

Loved the story, so raw and intense. I would have loved to have been there to clean you up.......yummy. Is chapter two on the way?

Hypocrites, NOT

To the commenter who thought those of us who think this woman is a whore are hypocrites, I beg to differ. She fucked a whole bunch of guys at a party she ostensibly attended to keep that from happening. Was the groom blameless? Hell no, he is an asshole. However, the worst he deserved was to have her leave him because she could not trust him. Of course, she would have had a hard time explaining how she knew what he had done.

What he did not deserve was to have her fuck all of his friends and then plan to spend her married life whoring herself out to any men willing to give her some dick. If she now feels she must experience a lot of other men she should call off her wedding and let the groom find someone who won't spout marriage vows while planning where she is going to get her next taste of strange stuff.

If not for her plans for future and significant infidelity, I could have probably gone with the idea that he deserved what happened. After all, if he had not fucked her first, the others might not have tried and she probably would not have relented regardless.

However, because of the future plans, this is just one more story glorifying the turning of a woman into a cheating whore. Very sad indeed.

DWMoroncock is so stupid

she tried to dial 911 but couldn't find eleven on the phone

this story is in the wrong category.

All Jerkoffs

What a fucked up tale. First the groom fucks a stripper for his bachelor party. Them everyone else fucks her, including her brother. Turns out the stripper was the bride. Who writes shit like this? Author, you have some serious mental issues. I think you need to spend some time in the nearest loony bin. Asshole.

HA

Good Story

I thoroughly enjoyed it, but I'm bothered by the brother's line if I don't sleep with you they might figure it out. Cause when you don't want to be the last guy in a gangbang, clearly the only explanation is she's your sister. I would've preferred if he threatened to reveal her identity if she didn't.

A boatload of dummies

Sluts and cheaters abound! Without rhyme or reason for their actions they go crazy. It just doesn't make sense. Which makes it just plain silly. Which made it a waste of time to read.

what we read was what we wanted to read

Those of us who ENJOY sex stories were acting like those whore masturbate and then after their orgasm ae a little sheepish about our behavior and blame others !
I did enjoy the story and grimanced a bit when the brother joined IN !

great story

would love to read what happens next between Jeff and his sister

No problem.

When you bluff you often have to see it thru!! Oh She started the bluff & had guts enough to follow thru. WTF Jeff was just another hard cock, & she was truely primed for another hard cock.
I hope she gets married & continues to give her brother a bunch of that pussy. Maybe even the bigfat cock too.
Good read, Thank You.

A fiancée is female...

...a fiancé is male. Rather key distinction, that.

And I'm getting married in the morning

Ding dong the bells are going to chime....

Lucky husband to be.... deceit and betrayal from zero minus one day. Fortunate that the marriage was doomed long before.

Hot story but...

how does Sam Not know its his fiancee. has not had sex with her before? that makes this just stupid. There is no way Sam is that clueless. The story ended before the wedding because there wasn't one. Sam never showed up because he knew and didn't want a skanky diseased slut for a wife.

What's good for the goose...

If she's going to keep doing this, that raises a question - is she now OK sharing her husband with other women? What's good for the goose is good for the gander.

As they both seem to want outside partners, they might make a viable "lifestyle couple΅ (as in swinging) except for one not-so-minor detail: at some point they need to start communicating with each other.