I don't worry about puctuation, but the miss spelled words in this story bothered me. Not so much miss spelled, but incomplete words dropping the first letter, or the last letter. All are pretty much from the writter being excited & missing the key.
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Anonymous08/03/14
Two major errors
At least post this mess correctly. Gay male or group sex would have been much better areas although I think it would have gotten bombed in either place. And you REALLY need to get an editor. As is, the story is just about unreadable.
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Anonymous08/04/14
my fantisy
Really hot _wish it was me eating her while you fucked her
English
errors
So many errors I stopped reading. Suggest you either proof read or use the services of an editor.
I felt the same.
I don't worry about puctuation, but the miss spelled words in this story bothered me. Not so much miss spelled, but incomplete words dropping the first letter, or the last letter. All are pretty much from the writter being excited & missing the key.
Two major errors
At least post this mess correctly. Gay male or group sex would have been much better areas although I think it would have gotten bombed in either place. And you REALLY need to get an editor. As is, the story is just about unreadable.
my fantisy
Really hot _wish it was me eating her while you fucked her
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