best story so far! good job!
A good story. Could have easily avoided all the personal nouns and it would have been more gripping. I could easily rewrite it and you could see how much more impact it could have had, but again, good work.
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best story so far! good job!
Too many (I's)
A good story. Could have easily avoided all the personal nouns and it would have been more gripping. I could easily rewrite it and you could see how much more impact it could have had, but again, good work.
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