I do not understand 1) how this should be bdsm when they whole thing is based in a night club in front of people? (yes I am aware it has bdsm qualities but it is focused on the in front of people part) and 2) please let me know why it is being voted so low so I can try to improve my stories in the future?
Limbo blond big titts slave give. My kind of storie.Too long to read in 1 go tell a friend to help plug my arse when finnished afterwoulds.
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Anonymous09/19/14
Critique
I liked this story, the only areas I could see your writing improve in is maybe build up to it more in the beginning, create more tension. Maybe get more detailed how she looked, her eyes, and what not. Also what are more things that happened to her on the dancefloor. Also a part of what makes reading humiliation stories hot is the reaction of the one getting spit on, like her blush her shame. Tears. IDK. thoughts.
English
Wrong Category
This trash should be in BDSM.
Please Help Me Out?
I do not understand 1) how this should be bdsm when they whole thing is based in a night club in front of people? (yes I am aware it has bdsm qualities but it is focused on the in front of people part) and 2) please let me know why it is being voted so low so I can try to improve my stories in the future?
my kind
Limbo blond big titts slave give. My kind of storie.Too long to read in 1 go tell a friend to help plug my arse when finnished afterwoulds.
Critique
I liked this story, the only areas I could see your writing improve in is maybe build up to it more in the beginning, create more tension. Maybe get more detailed how she looked, her eyes, and what not. Also what are more things that happened to her on the dancefloor. Also a part of what makes reading humiliation stories hot is the reaction of the one getting spit on, like her blush her shame. Tears. IDK. thoughts.
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